The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland.
Sample Response
The table shows how people in different age groups spend their leisure time in Someland annuallyover the course of a year. Overall, the amount of time spent on leisure activitiesamount of leisure time available varies considerably across the age groups and the different age groupspeople of different age levels have very different ways of spending their leisure time. As people in Someland ageAccording to the figures, as people age in Someland, their time spent socialising decreasestheir time for socialising reduces. Teenagers and people in their twenties spend around 500 and 350 hours per year on socialising with a group of more than 4 people. Although the total hours of socialising in their thirties, forties, fifties and sixtiestheir 30s, 40s, 50s and 60s decline from 350 to 225 hoursare fairly constant (between 300-350), socialising with more than four people falls to 50 hours in the thirties and forties and then to 25 hours from the fifties onwardsocialising with more than 4 people drops dramatically to 50 hours in the 30s and 40s age groups. Group and individual exercise follow a similar pattern. People of all ages spend a substantial amount of leisure time on activities such as watchingspend a good part of their leisure time on entertainment such as enjoying television and videosTV/ video and cinema. In both cases, teenagers and retired people spend around twice as much time as those who are at working age. Watching television and videos rangesHome entertainment ranges from 1,200 hours for teenagers and 1,100 hours for people aged seventy or overjust over a thousand hours for teenagers and retired people and between 400 and 700 hours for the intervening age groupsan average of 600 hours for everyone else. Cinema accounts for 100 hours for teenagers and 75 hours for retired peopleCinema accounts for 100 hours of the teenagers and retired people’s leisure and 25-75 hours for the other age groups25-50 hours for the rest. It is worth noticing that there is a significant trend towards solitary and smaller group activities as people grow older.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report is clearly organised and identifies the broad shift toward solitary or smaller-group leisure as people age, supported by several useful comparisons. Its main limitation is data accuracy: some socialising totals are misstated, the exercise categories are generalised together despite different patterns, and cinema comparisons are overstated. The highest priority is to verify each category separately and select exact figures that substantiate the overview.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a relevant overview and covers major leisure categories, but several figures and trends are inaccurate or overgeneralised.
Check each row independently, noting that both younger groups record 350 hours of large-group socialising and that individual and group exercise follow different patterns.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from socialising and exercise to entertainment, with clear referencing and generally effective connections.
Separate the exercise and entertainment comparisons into distinct focused paragraphs so each pattern is easier to follow.
Lexical Resource
The report uses varied, appropriate vocabulary for trends and comparisons, with only occasional awkward or imprecise phrasing.
Use exact category labels consistently and replace broad phrases such as different age levels with more precise age-group references.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of sentence structures is used with strong control, and the few grammatical lapses do not impede communication.
Refine comparison structures, especially sentences combining ranges and averages, to maintain parallel and unambiguous grammar.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland.
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