The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland.
Sample Response
The table shows data on the leisure activities of people from different age groups per year in Somelandin a year in Someland. Generally speaking, watching TV and videos is the most time-consuming leisure activitymost preferred free time activity for people of all age groups while annual time spent on other leisure activities variestime spent yearly on other leisure activities vary based on people’s age. According to the table, teenagers and people aged 70 and overyoung and older people spend more leisure time watching TV programmes and other videos than people in the other age groupsthe people from other age groups. Watching TV/videos accounts forTV watching consumes 1,200 hours1200 hours for teenagers and 1100 hours for people aged 70 and overelder population. This is the most popular leisure-time activity of people as they spend more time on this activity than others. Socialising with four or more peopleSocialising with more people is popular among teenagers while as age increaseswith the increasing age, people prefer to socialise in groups of four or fewersocialise with fewer people. Teenagers and young adults spend time on group exerciselike group exercise while no time is recorded for this activity among people aged 60 and overit is avoided by people who are above 60 years old. People in their 30s and 40sPeople from 30 to 40 seem to spendseems like spend 200 hours per yeararound 200 hours per years on individual exerciseexercises. Finally, watching movies in a cinema hall comprises 100 leisure hours for teenagers while it kept on decreasing with the increase of their age except for the 70 plus population who spend more time on this activity than 20 to 70 years old people.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview and selects the table’s strongest patterns, including the dominance of television, age-related socialising preferences, and the decline in group exercise. Its main weakness is that some comparisons are expressed too generally and several awkward grammatical forms reduce precision. Prioritise adding a few exact cross-age comparisons for socialising and exercise, then proofread agreement, plurals, and natural data-reporting phrases.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and mostly accurate selection cover the dominant activity and several important age-related contrasts, although some trends lack supporting figures.
Support the socialising and exercise patterns with exact values from contrasting age groups, not only broad descriptions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report moves logically by leisure activity and uses contrast effectively, but dense paragraphing and some repetitive explanation limit clarity.
Separate the overview from two grouped detail paragraphs, organising activities by those that decline with age and those that vary.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for describing preferences and changes, though expressions such as TV watching consumes hours and comprises leisure hours are unnatural.
Use precise combinations such as people spent, accounted for, declined with age, and rose again among the oldest group.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex comparisons are attempted and meaning remains clear, but agreement, infinitive, plural, and tense errors recur.
Correct forms such as time varies, people in their thirties and forties spend, hours per year, and cinema time decreased.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland.
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