The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland.
Sample Response
The data presented in the table outlines how much leisure time people in different age groups have each yearpeople from different age groups spend yearly in Someland. Overall,It is obvious that watching TV is a popular leisure activitya popular form of free-time activity for Somelanders. According to the figures, watching TV is a common recreation among people in Someland, teenagers and elder people watch TV even more. They spend over a thousand hours per year watchingover a thousand hours per year to watch different TV programmes while viewing time ranges from 400 to 700 hoursit ranges from 400 to 700 hours among the other age groupsamong others. Young people have more friends to socialize while this number decreases when they grow up. Teens spend 350 hoursas much as 350 hours socializing with 4 or more friends while the figure is only 25 to 50 hoursit is only 25 to 50 hours for adults and elders. By contrastOn the contrary, people in their 30sthirties spend the mosthighest time socializing with four or fewer peoplesocializing with fewer people. Individual exercise is preferred by people in their 30s and 40s while group exercise is more popular among teenagers. OlderElder people mostly refrain from exercisingdoing exercises in their free time. Going to the cinemaWatching cinema is not a common leisure activity among Somelanders and teenagers spend 100 hours on it, more than any other age groupdoing so which is higher than time spent in this pursuit by citizens of other ages.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report selects the main age patterns accurately, especially the dominance of television, younger people's greater group socialising and sport, and the thirties group's preference for smaller gatherings. Its main limitation is an overview focused almost entirely on television, with a few age comparisons compressed or slightly overstated. Prioritise a broader overview contrasting younger, middle-aged, and older leisure profiles before giving selected figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most major patterns and representative figures are accurate, but the overview is narrow and the equal 350-hour figure for people in their twenties is omitted.
Summarise that television dominates all ages, group activities decline with age, and smaller-group socialising peaks in the thirties, then support each pattern selectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves coherently by activity from television and socialising to exercise and cinema, but one-paragraph presentation limits clarity.
Use an overview plus detail paragraphs grouping passive activities and social or physical activities.
Lexical Resource
A suitable range of leisure and comparison vocabulary is used, with some repetition and a few unnatural expressions.
Prefer 'older people', 'spend time socialising', 'four or fewer people', 'cinema attendance', and 'hours devoted to this activity'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Most structures communicate comparisons clearly, though comma splices, article choices, and reference problems appear occasionally.
Separate independent clauses and use precise subjects, especially in the sentence comparing television hours for teenagers, older people, and other age groups.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland.
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