The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.
Sample Response
The three provided graphs represent data on the typestype of music albums purchased by the different age groups in Britain. As is observed, Rock is most popular music type among the three music categories and people purchasing classical music album are mostly over 45 years and male listeners purchased more album than that of females. In all cases, men purchase more music albums than women dodid. Rock and pop music are more popular among young British peopleyoung British while classical music is more popular among people aged 45 and overwhile classical among the people over 45 years. The rock music album marketThe market of rock music albums is mainly dominated by men with a purchase raterecord of over 30% compared to 16% for women16% purchase done by women. From the first graph, it is obvious that interest in pop music seems steady among people aged 16 to 44the population who aged from 16 to 44 and after people turn to 45 years, they continue to buy pop type music albums, the ratio decreases nevertheless. Among Britons aged 16 to 34Among the Britons of 16 to 34 years old, rock musicthe rock music is most popularrevered. In contrast to the classical music graphOpposite to the classic music graph, interest in rock musicthe interest in rock music fallskeeps falling after people reach their mid-thirties and a sharp fall after the age of 45after the age 45 is visible.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies several broad patterns accurately, especially the consistent male lead and the younger appeal of pop and rock, and it includes a recognizable overview. Its main limitation is selective coverage: the classical chart is barely developed, pop figures are mostly absent, and the claim that rock is generally most popular is overgeneralized. Prioritize balanced, data-supported comparisons across all three genres and age groups.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several valid trends are given, but coverage is uneven and some claims are insufficiently supported by the charts.
Compare all three genres with representative figures for both sex and age, especially the underdeveloped classical and pop data.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information follows a broadly understandable progression, although the single-block presentation and some overloaded sentences weaken organization.
Separate the overview from two focused detail paragraphs and keep each comparison within a clearly controlled sentence.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient range of topic vocabulary, but several word choices and collocations are awkward or imprecise.
Use neutral chart language such as percentages, proportions, and purchases instead of imprecise expressions such as most revered or purchase done.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms communicates the main meaning, but recurring article, agreement, plural, tense, and clause-control errors reduce accuracy.
Proofread noun phrases and subject-verb agreement, then divide long clauses to avoid run-on structures.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.
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