The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.
Sample Response
The given charts showenumerate the percentage of pop, rock and classical music album purchasers in Britain, grouped by sex and agebased on their sex and age group in Britain. As a general trend, men represented a higher percentage of album purchasersmen were dominant music album purchasers in every music genreevery kind of music genre. In pop music, buyers aged 16–34buyers from 16-34 years old were well ahead ofthan other age groups. 16-25 years old pop album purchasers stood close to that of 25-34 years old and they combinedly purchased more than 60% pop albums sold in Britain. AboutAlmost 28% pop albums were purchased by males while the figure for females was below 20%this was less than 20% by females. People over 45 years old were less enthusiastic about pop and rock music while their main interest was classical music. With regardregards to rock-music album purchasesrock music album purchase, a striking similarity between the purchasing trends of pop and rock music albums could be observed. Nevertheless, rock music was the most popular music genre for both male and female prefered pop music. On the other hand,On the other, classical music was most popular among people aged 45 and overmost preferred by the people who were over 45 years old and about 20% of that group bought classical albumsthey purchased 20% music albums of this music type. However, young Britons were muchquite less enthusiastic about classical music with only about 1–2% buying albums in this genrewith their 1-2 percent purchase of the album of this genre. Interestingly, British people from 25-34 age group preferred classical music while British citizens from 35-44 did not.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response gives a clear overview and identifies several important age and gender patterns across the three genres. Its main limitation is that some comparisons are misleading or imprecise, especially the combined pop figure, the statement about 25–34-year-olds preferring classical music, and the unclear male/female popularity comparison. Prioritise checking each cross-chart claim against the bars and express comparisons in unambiguous sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and relevant figures cover all three genres, but several comparisons are inaccurate or misleading and rock data are underdeveloped.
Compare the same groups across charts carefully and support each major trend with accurate, clearly interpreted figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a sensible pop–rock–classical sequence, although the single paragraph and some faulty transitions weaken the organisation.
Use separate overview and detail paragraphs, and choose linking phrases that state the relationship between ideas precisely.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary shows useful range for describing charts, but awkward collocations, imprecise word choices, and spelling errors reduce precision.
Use standard chart phrases such as 'was higher than' and proofread forms including 'preferred' and age-group descriptions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied sentence structures, but frequent errors in comparisons, articles, agreement, and sentence construction sometimes obscure meaning.
Prioritise accurate comparative structures and revise malformed sentences so each clause has a clear grammatical relationship.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.
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