The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
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The maps illustrate an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and the developments that are planned to be carried out in the future. Overall, the space will undergo some noticeable changes, namely the addition of shops, a medical centre, housesmedical centre, houses and other essential amenities.
At present, the areaPrior to redesign, nowadays, the space is mostly occupied by factories, built all around the roundabout and on the east side of the site. On the north side of the river a small areaare is used as farmlanddedicated to a farmland.
After a major redesign, the factories will be demolished and a large portion of the space will be occupied by housing. On the east side of the area it is planned to build a school along with a playground on the south of the riversouth-east side of the river. On the south-west side of thea roundabout the factory will be converted into shops. On the oppositeoposite side of the road willwould be a medical centre. Another small roundabout will be added to the southsouthward, which will be directlydirecly connected to the main roundabout.
In addition, athe bridge will be built acrosson the river, which will connect the south with the north side of the industrial site. On the north side of the river the farmland will be relocated to the north-eastrelocated on the north-east side and its place will be occupied by housing.the housing.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response effectively summarizes the major transformations planned for the Norbiton industrial area, featuring a clear overview and accurate overall comparisons. Its main limitation lies in minor grammatical inaccuracies and occasional spelling mistakes. To raise the writing quality, focus on refining complex sentence structures and proofreading for spelling and punctuation errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main features and overall changes between the current and future maps are well covered with relevant details provided.
Ensure directional references are entirely accurate across all described features, such as the position of the playground relative to the river.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overview and details are arranged logically into paragraphs showing a clear chronological and spatial progression.
Avoid redundant transition phrases at the beginning of clauses to make the narrative flow more naturally.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient variety of location and transformation vocabulary is used to describe map changes clearly.
Proofread carefully to prevent minor spelling errors such as 'are' for area and 'oposite' for opposite.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences is attempted with generally good control, though grammatical errors occur.
Eliminate redundant time markers in clause openings to ensure clean, error-free introductory structures.