The charts below qive information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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The pie charts depict the proportion of different age groups inof Yemen and Italy in 2000 and predictions for 2050.
Overall, in Yemen and Italy, the proportion of people aged 60 and over is projected to witness an upward trend, while those of the 0-14 age bracket will decrease. In both countries, working-age people aged 15 to 59people between 15 and 59 will account for the largest proportion in 2050.
In Yemen, people aged 0-14 took up 50.1%, which is projected to decreasewith its proportion decreasing to 37.0% by 2050. The proportion of the 15-59 age bracket was 46.3%, which is expected to rise to 57.3% in 2050. In addition, in 2000,Besides, in 2000, those aged 60 and over accounted for the smallest proportion at 3.6%, and this figure is projected to risewith its prediction to increase to 5.7% in 2050.
When it comes to Italy, only the percentageportion of people over 60 is forecast to increase from 24.1% to 42.3%. While people aged between 15 and 59 and children aged 0-14those under 14 constituted 61.6% and 14.3% of the total age breakdown in 2000, these figures are predicted to decline to 46.2% and 11.5% respectively.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The essay provides an accurate and clear comparison of the demographic projections for both countries, supported by well-selected data and a clear overview. The main limitation is a slight reliance on repetitive phrasing when describing statistical changes. To reach a higher level, aim to incorporate more varied complex sentence structures and comparative structures throughout the detailed paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All key features and data points are presented accurately with a well-developed overall trend overview.
Highlight key comparisons between the two countries more explicitly within the detailed body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically with clear paragraphing and smooth transitions between sentences.
Use a wider variety of cohesive devices to connect statistical comparisons smoothly.
Lexical Resource
A good range of vocabulary related to proportions and trends is used accurately throughout the response.
Vary vocabulary further when referring to percentages and demographic changes to avoid minor repetition.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide variety of structures is used with strong grammatical control and appropriate tense choices.
Incorporate more complex comparative clause structures to enhance grammatical flexibility.