The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
Sample Response
The diagrams outline why students from different age groups study and the support they get from their employers. Overall, having a good career is the main reason for young people to studyfor young to study while personal interest is the main reasonit is personal interest for older studentsgrown-ups. Moreover, young employees get more support from their employers regarding their education.
According to the first bar graph, people who are under 40 years old mostly study for their careersstudy for the career while people over 49 years mainly study out of personal interestmainly study for their interest. Interestingly for the age group 40 to 49, the number of people who study for career and the number of people who study for interest is the same. 80% of students80% students under 26 years continue their education to build a career. Seven7 out of ten students over 49 years old study out of personal interestdo so for their interest, rather than for career reasonsrather than the career.
Graph 2 shows that more than 60% of studentsmore than 60% students under 26 years old get support from their employers for their education and this supportsupports includes the time off and financial supportmonetary supports they get. This percentage decreases as age increasesreduces with the increase of age and in the 30–39 age groupat 30-39 age group, about 35%32% get the support from the employers. After that, the employers’ support for their employees’ education increases and reaches 45%reaches to 45% for the over-49 age groupthe over 49 year’s age group.
(Approximately 263 words) (This model answer can be followed as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report clearly identifies the opposing age-related study motives and supports them with accurate figures, while also describing the decline and later recovery in employer support. The main limitation is recurring awkwardness in articles, agreement, plurals, and collocation, and the overview does not explicitly capture the U-shaped support pattern. Prioritise a sharper two-part overview and a careful language edit, while removing the source-site commentary after the report.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response accurately selects the main motivation trends and representative values from both charts, though the employer-support overview is incomplete.
State explicitly that support falls from about 65% to its lowest point among 30–39-year-olds before recovering to 45%.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction, motivation details, and support details form a clear progression, with comparisons generally easy to follow.
Remove the irrelevant parenthetical publishing note and make the overview a complete summary of both charts.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for trends and comparisons, but several awkward collocations and repeated forms reduce precision.
Use natural combinations such as study for career advancement, employer support falls, financial assistance, and people aged over 49.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The report uses both simple and complex sentences effectively, although article, plural, possessive, and agreement errors recur.
Proofread noun phrases and agreement, especially forms such as 80% of students, this support includes, and the over-49 age group.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
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