The maps show a road system as it is now and the propesed changes in future to reduce the number of accidents.
Sample Response
The maps provide information about thea current road system and proposed changes to increase the safety of its users.
Overall, the main changes being proposed include a centralmajor roundabout, the installation of fourseveral sets of traffic lights, and the straightening of Low Lane and relocation of the supermarket accesssome restructuring of existing roadways.
The intersection of City Road and Low Lane is one of the four locations where frequent accidents occurareas where frequent accidents occur in the area and is proposed to have a set of traffic lights installed to minimise such occurrences. The intersection of City Road and Forest Road is another accident-prone areaalso another accident prone area and is the site of a proposed roundabout.
Other accident-prone areasOther accident prone areas are at the supermarket access road on City Road, and at the intersection of Low Lane and Forest Road. The supermarket access is planned to be moved to become part ofto be moved to be a part of the roundabout, while Low Lane will be straightened to reduce accidents therein order to avoid accidents there.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is concise, clearly organised, and accurately captures the principal redesign: the roundabout, traffic lights, the realigned Low Lane, and the relocated supermarket access. Its main limitation is that the traffic-light arrangement and some road changes are described only generally. The highest-priority improvement is to specify where the multiple lights will be installed and relate each change more explicitly to the current accident points.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and body cover nearly all major proposed changes accurately, although the multiple traffic-light locations are not fully detailed.
State that several sets of lights are planned around the City Road-Low Lane area and describe their positions more precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure is logical, with a clear overview followed by well-grouped details about the accident sites and proposed changes.
Link each current accident location directly to its corresponding future modification for an even sharper comparison.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is precise and appropriately varied, including effective terms such as 'restructuring', 'installed', and 'straightened'.
Refine minor phrasing by avoiding repetition in expressions such as 'areas where frequent accidents occur in the area'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex sentences with good control, and the few awkward constructions do not impede meaning.
Edit long relative-clause sentences for concision and hyphenate compound modifiers such as 'accident-prone'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The maps show a road system as it is now and the propesed changes in future to reduce the number of accidents.
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