The maps show a road system as it is now and the propesed changes in future to reduce the number of accidents.
Sample Response
The maps provide a number of suggested changes to the existing road system to enhance the safety of roads.
Overall, the primary proposed changes are the construction of a major roundabout, the installation of sets of traffic lights and the restructuring of current roads.
The intersection of Forest Road and City Road is an accident-prone area, so there is a suggestion to erect a roundabout at this site to control the traffic. As accidents frequently take place at the junction of City Road and Low Lane, a set of traffic lights are planned to be installed to avoid accidents.
Other accident hotspots are at the supermarket access on the City Road and the intersection of Low Land and Forest Road. According to the plan, the supermarket access will be moved to be a part of the roundabout, while Low Lane will be straightened to minimize the likelihood of traffic incidents.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Introduce both maps Original: provide a number of suggested changes Suggested revision: show the existing road system and several proposed changes Why it matters: The revised wording makes clear that one map shows the current layout and the other the proposal.
- 2. Use natural collocation Original: safety of roads Suggested revision: road safety Why it matters: 'Road safety' is the standard concise collocation.
- 3. Name the realignment Original: restructuring of current roads Suggested revision: realignment of Low Lane Why it matters: The proposed map specifically shows Low Lane being straightened rather than roads generally being restructured.
- 4. Use concise proposal wording Original: there is a suggestion to erect a roundabout Suggested revision: a roundabout is proposed Why it matters: This states the planned construction more directly and naturally.
- 5. Match number and verb Original: a set of traffic lights are Suggested revision: sets of traffic lights are Why it matters: The proposed map shows multiple sets, and the plural subject agrees with 'are'.
- 6. Use the stated aim Original: avoid Suggested revision: reduce Why it matters: The task states that the changes aim to reduce the number of accidents, not guarantee their complete prevention.
- 7. Remove the article Original: on the City Road Suggested revision: on City Road Why it matters: Named roads normally do not take the definite article.
- 8. Correct the road name Original: Land Suggested revision: Lane Why it matters: The map labels this road 'Low Lane'.
- 9. Use precise wording Original: moved to be a part of Suggested revision: incorporated into Why it matters: This concisely describes the supermarket access becoming part of the roundabout.
- 10. Include all traffic lights Suggested revision: Mention the traffic lights at the school access as well as the multiple controlled approaches around the City Road–Low Lane junction. Why it matters: The proposed map shows an additional controlled school access and more than one set of lights at the other junction.
Suggested Rewrites
- provide a number of suggested changes show the existing road system and several proposed changes
- safety of roads road safety
- restructuring of current roads realignment of Low Lane
- there is a suggestion to erect a roundabout a roundabout is proposed
- a set of traffic lights are sets of traffic lights are
- avoid reduce
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response is concise, logically organised, and accurately explains the roundabout, relocated supermarket access, and straightening of Low Lane. Its main limitation is incomplete coverage of the traffic-light changes, since only the City Road–Low Lane junction is described while several other planned sets near the school are omitted. The priority is to account for all major installations shown on the proposed map while retaining the current clarity.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and most major alterations are accurate and well selected, although several planned traffic-light installations near the school are omitted.
Describe all the traffic-light locations and make their relationship to the existing accident hotspots explicit.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically sequenced, clearly paragraphing the overview and two groups of related road changes.
Strengthen the grouping further by presenting the traffic-control measures together before moving to access and road-layout changes.
Lexical Resource
A strong range of precise map and safety vocabulary conveys the changes naturally, with only an isolated naming slip.
Proofread place names such as Low Lane and prefer the most exact phrasing for how the supermarket connects to the roundabout.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex structures are handled with strong control, and only minor agreement or article errors occur.
Correct localised agreement and article issues, such as using a set of traffic lights is planned and avoiding unnecessary the before road names.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The maps show a road system as it is now and the propesed changes in future to reduce the number of accidents.
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