The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
Sample Response
The table illustrates that, according to US figures, the number of the economic and social index in four different nations in the year 1994.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the graph that the annual income of Japanese natives had maximum pay rates in US dollars instead of others, but Peru and Zaire had the least annual income per person in US dollars.
In detail, according to the index, Canada gave maximum annual income per person, with shares at 15760. Similarly, Canada also followed a positive trend with the lowest pay annual salary per person, which accounted for 48600 lesser than Japan. Moreover, life expectancy at birth was slightly similar between Canada and Japan, with shares at almost 78 and 50 in Peru in the year 1994. Whereas the ratio of annual income per person captured had the lowest income at 100 in Peru, in the case of Zaire, this number plummeted by US$30.
Furthermore, according to US statistics, the barometer of individuals from Canada consumed more daily calories than others with shares 3326, and this value got declined by 520 in Japan in the year 1994. However, the daily calories supply per person in Peru and Zaire had a different numbers, which were recorded in 1927 and 1749. It is interesting to note that Canada and Japan had the same adult literacy rate at 99%, but Peru’s percentage got plunged by 28% and 75% in Zaire.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct highest income Original: Canada gave maximum annual income per person Suggested revision: Japan recorded the highest annual income per person Why it matters: The table shows Japan, rather than Canada, as having the highest annual income.
- 2. Format the figure Original: with shares at 15760 Suggested revision: at US$15,760 Why it matters: This is an income figure, so it should be expressed as a dollar amount rather than a share.
- 3. Report Canada accurately Original: Canada also followed a positive trend with the lowest pay annual salary per person Suggested revision: Canada's annual income per person was US$11,100 Why it matters: The table presents a single-year income figure, so neither a trend nor the lowest value is shown for Canada.
- 4. Correct the difference Original: which accounted for 48600 lesser than Japan Suggested revision: which was US$4,660 lower than Japan's Why it matters: The difference between Canada's US$11,100 and Japan's US$15,760 is US$4,660.
- 5. Use natural comparison Original: was slightly similar between Canada and Japan Suggested revision: was similar in Canada and Japan Why it matters: The revised phrase uses the natural preposition and states the close comparison clearly.
- 6. Correct life expectancy Original: with shares at almost 78 and 50 in Peru Suggested revision: at 76 and 78 years, respectively, compared with 51 years in Peru Why it matters: The visual gives 76 for Canada, 78 for Japan, and 51 for Peru.
- 7. Name the source Original: according to US statistics Suggested revision: according to the UN statistics Why it matters: The task identifies the figures as United Nations statistics.
- 8. Describe calorie supply Original: the barometer of individuals from Canada consumed more daily calories than others Suggested revision: Canada had the highest daily calorie supply per person Why it matters: A country has a calorie-supply figure; a barometer does not consume calories.
- 9. State calories precisely Original: with shares 3326 Suggested revision: at 3,326 calories per person Why it matters: The figure is a daily calorie supply per person, not a share.
- 10. Correct the comparison Original: this value got declined by 520 in Japan Suggested revision: this figure was 480 lower in Japan Why it matters: Japan's 2,846 calories were 480 below Canada's 3,326.
- 11. Fix agreement Original: a different numbers Suggested revision: different figures Why it matters: The plural noun requires no singular article.
- 12. Clarify paired figures Original: which were recorded in 1927 and 1749 Suggested revision: recorded at 1,927 and 1,749, respectively Why it matters: Respectively makes the Peru-Zaire correspondence explicit.
Suggested Rewrites
- Canada gave maximum annual income per person Japan recorded the highest annual income per person
- with shares at 15760 at US$15,760
- Canada also followed a positive trend with the lowest pay annual salary per person Canada's annual income per person was US$11,100
- which accounted for 48600 lesser than Japan which was US$4,660 lower than Japan's
- was slightly similar between Canada and Japan was similar in Canada and Japan
- with shares at almost 78 and 50 in Peru at 76 and 78 years, respectively, compared with 51 years in Peru
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response covers all four indicators and uses paragraphing to separate the overview from details. However, the overview is too narrow and several comparisons or figures are inaccurate, especially the contradictory income reporting and literacy data, while frequent awkward phrasing reduces clarity. Prioritize checking every figure against the table and expressing each comparison in simple, precise language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies some broad income contrasts and covers all four indicators, but the overview is limited and several figures and comparisons are inaccurate or contradictory.
Verify each value against the table and give an overview contrasting Canada and Japan's generally stronger indicators with Peru and Zaire's lower results.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is divided into recognizable paragraphs and follows the table's indicators, though progression is weakened by abrupt or illogical links and a sentence fragment.
Organize each detail paragraph around one clear comparison and use linking words only where the relationship between sentences is explicit.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in vocabulary, but frequent inappropriate choices and collocations such as 'shares,' 'barometer,' and 'got plunged' make descriptions imprecise.
Use standard Task 1 language such as 'stood at,' 'was higher than,' and 'fell to' instead of forced synonyms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, clause construction, and comparative structures regularly reduce accuracy.
Build shorter complete sentences and check subject-verb agreement and comparative forms before adding complex clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
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