The table gives information about the number of people working as researchers in technology per million people in five countries.
Sample Response
The tabletable data compares the number of tech researchers per million peoplepopulation across five countries over five successive yearsin five countries in five successive years beginning in 2003commencing from 2003. Overall, Poland had the highest numbera greater number of researchers per million people working in technologycitizens in technology while Togo had the least. In detailGetting back to the details, Turkey had slightly less than 50 technology-related researchers per million people in 2003in 2003 per million of its population which rose each yearmoderately increased each year and reached over 100reached to over 100 in 2007. Poland had the highest number of tech researchers per million peoplelargest proportion of tech researchers among these countries and there were 285 technology researchers285 Polish were tech researchers per million people in 2003. However, over timeover the time this number declined continuously and after 4 years it stood at 226 per million. Despite the drop, the ratio of researchers in Poland in 2007 was the highest and roughly double that ofdouble than that of Moldova and TurkeyTukey. Mexican tech researchers’ ratio in 2003 was 147 per million which increased to 242 two years later and dropped to 183113 in 2007. Moldova had 103 of these professionals per million and in 4 years, this figure reached 114this proportion reached to 114 after falling for two years and then risingwith a decrease in the previous three years. The lowest ratio of tech researchers was in Togo where only 18 such professionals existed in 2003 in every million population and remained the same in 2007.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response covers all five countries and identifies the broad extremes clearly, with a generally easy-to-follow country-by-country account. Its main limitation is data accuracy: Mexico's 2007 figure is 183, not 113, and Moldova did not decline throughout the previous three years. Check every reported value and describe fluctuating patterns precisely before refining the already adequate range of language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and most major trends are relevant, but the incorrect Mexican endpoint and misleading account of Moldova weaken accuracy.
Verify each figure against the table and describe Mexico's peak and Moldova's fall-then-recovery pattern accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a coherent country-by-country sequence, but presenting the entire report as one paragraph limits structural clarity.
Separate the overview from two grouped detail paragraphs, organising countries by rising, falling and fluctuating trends.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonable range of trend and comparison vocabulary, although awkward collocations and repetition reduce precision.
Replace forms such as "reached to" and "double than" with "reached" and "roughly twice as high as."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex sentences are attempted, but recurring article, noun-form and comparative errors remain noticeable throughout.
Focus on accurate comparison patterns and noun phrases, for example "the number reached 106" and "285 Polish researchers per million people."
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table gives information about the number of people working as researchers in technology per million people in five countries.
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