The diagram below illustrates the UK immigration, emigration and net migration during 10 years from 1999 to 2008.
Sample Response
The diagram depicts the levelsnumber of immigration, emigration and netgross migration in the UK over the decade between 1999 and 2008. Overall, the number of immigrantsimmigration population outnumbered emigration figuresnumber significantly, both witnessing an upward trend over the given period. In addition,Besides, the net migrationimmigration remained relatively stable and increased slightly, peaking inat 2004 and 2007 before falling to its initial levelthe original sum. Regarding the number of immigrantsimmigration people, it rose from 450,000 to 510,000 by 2003, before surging to nearly 600,000 and experiencingexperienced moderate fluctuations. Emigration increased by 100,000 from 300,000 by 2006, followed by a drop to around 340,000 in 2007by 2006, followed by a plunge to 310,000 in 2007 before rebounding to roughly 420,000over 410,000. When it comes to the net migration, it levelled out at 150,000 between 1999 and 2003, after which it peaked at nearly 250,000 in 2004 and reached a secondary peak of around 240,000 in 2007hit a peak of 250,000 in 2004 and 2007. In 2005, 2006 and 2008, net migration decreasedits population decreased to 200,000.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The summary effectively highlights the overall trends and divides the main data points logically across paragraphs. However, accuracy issues in reporting specific figures and several unnatural word combinations hold the response back. Focus on verifying data details against the visual prompt and using precise collocations when describing demographic figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview is included and main key trends are identified, though a few data details are inaccurate, such as stating net migration peaked equally in 2007.
Double-check numerical values against the chart axes to ensure all key figures and peak years are recorded accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged logically into clear paragraphs with appropriate linking expressions, though some transitions feel slightly mechanical.
Vary cohesive devices naturally rather than relying repeatedly on set phrases like 'Regarding' and 'When it comes to'.
Lexical Resource
A good variety of trend vocabulary is used, but there are noticeable errors in word choice and noun phrasing, such as using 'immigration people' or 'gross migration'.
Use precise nouns when referring to category groups, preferring terms like 'immigrants', 'emigrants', or 'number of arrivals'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence structures is attempted with good overall control, despite minor prepositional errors and occasional awkward verb-form connections.
Ensure proper preposition usage with time expressions, such as using 'in' instead of 'at' for specific years.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram below illustrates the UK immigration, emigration and net migration during 10 years from 1999 to 2008.
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