The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Sample Response
The diagrams illustrate the average proportions of three types of nutrients in typical meals, which can be unhealthy if consumed in excessive quantitiesconsumed too much. The three types includeincludes sodium, saturated fat and added sugar. The data is taken from the United States of America. The first chart shows the average percentages of sodium. Dinner contains the most sodium(43%). Breakfast and snacks include an equal proportion of sodium consumed, with each of them accounting for 14%adding up 14% of sodium. Meanwhile, lunch accounted forThrough eating lunch, 29% of sodium29% sodium is consumed. The second chart shows the percentages of saturated fat in meals. Dinner accounted for 37% of saturated fatBy eating dinner, 31% saturated fat is consumed. Lunch contributes to a consumption of 26% of saturated fat26% saturated fat, followed by snacks with 21% and breakfast with 16%. Regarding added sugar, the data indicatesThe last chart illustrates the proportions of added sugar. Snacks contain the highest proportion of added sugar (42%)highest amount of added sugar(42%). A typical dinner includes 23% of added sugar23% added sugar, while lunch contains 19% and breakfast includes 16%. OverallAll in all, the diagrams show thatdiagrams show that every typical meal consumed in the USA contains a percentage of at least 14% of nutrients that can be unhealthy if consumed excessivelyif eaten too much.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response successfully covers all main charts with generally accurate data reporting, though it misread the dinner figure for saturated fat as 31% instead of 37%. The overall progression is easy to follow, but the overview is weak and the report relies heavily on repetitive sentence patterns. To raise the overall quality, synthesize main trends more effectively in the overview and use more varied grammatical structures when comparing figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key features are covered, but one figure is reported inaccurately and the conclusion offers a weak overview rather than highlighting overall trends.
Provide a clear summary highlighting dominant trends, such as dinner accounting for the most sodium and fat while snacks dominate added sugar intake.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay follows a logical structure chart by chart, though paragraphing and transitions are somewhat mechanical.
Group similar data points across charts using comparative linking phrases rather than describing each chart in isolation.
Lexical Resource
An adequate vocabulary range is used to report percentages, though phrasing is frequently repetitive.
Vary word choices and phrases for expressing percentages and proportions, avoiding repetitive structures like 'contains' and 'consumed'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and compound sentences is used with mostly clear meaning, despite minor subject-verb agreement and spacing errors.
Ensure correct subject-verb agreement with plural subjects and add proper spacing around punctuation marks.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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