The flowchart below shows the process involved in completing the work experience requirement for university students. Fulfilling the work Experience Requirement Credits will be awarded when the final report is submitted.
Sample Response
The flow chart shows steps involved in gaining work experience before completing the graduation by university students to succeed in getting their first job. Due to this, some university insists all students must complete a work experience requirement to be awarded with credits after submission of the final report. The initial stage is called Application and a student, in this stage, picks some approved workplaces and submit applications to his preferred workplaces. The next stage is Approval stage and if a student gets an acceptance letter from an office, he then needs to submit it to the professor for approval. The third stage, which is known as Schedule, requires the approved students to arrange his work schedule which should be at least ten hours per week over twenty weeks. The report is the 4th step and this stage requires a pupil to submit the report form every Friday to the professor. The fifth stage is Evaluation and takes place during the final work week and a student meets the work supervisor who based on the report and meeting submits an Evaluation form. In the final stage, which is called Final Report, a student requires submitting the final report before the last week of spring term. By following these steps and subsequently submitting the final report, the pupil receives credit from the university.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use standard spelling Original: flow chart Suggested revision: flowchart Why it matters: 'Flowchart' is conventionally written as one word.
- 2. Repair sentence structure Original: steps involved in gaining work experience before completing the graduation by university students Suggested revision: the steps university students follow to complete a work-experience requirement before graduation Why it matters: The replacement removes the unnatural passive structure and incorrect phrase 'complete the graduation'.
- 3. Remove unsupported purpose Original: to succeed in getting their first job Suggested revision: Delete Why it matters: The diagram presents a credit requirement but does not state that its purpose is securing a first job.
- 4. Fix number agreement Original: some university insists Suggested revision: some universities insist Why it matters: The plural determiner 'some' requires a plural noun and verb.
- 5. Fix verb pattern Original: awarded with credits Suggested revision: awarded credits Why it matters: The verb 'award' takes the recipient and object directly in this passive construction.
- 6. Add stage label Original: called Application Suggested revision: called the Application stage Why it matters: Adding the article and noun makes the stage name fit the sentence naturally.
- 7. Include interview step Original: picks some approved workplaces Suggested revision: chooses potential workplaces from an approved list and arranges interviews Why it matters: The Application box includes arranging interviews as well as choosing workplaces.
- 8. Fix subject agreement Original: submit applications Suggested revision: submits applications Why it matters: The singular subject 'a student' requires the third-person singular verb 'submits'.
- 9. Add definite article Original: is Approval stage Suggested revision: is the Approval stage Why it matters: A named stage requires 'the' in this structure.
- 10. Match pronouns Original: requires the approved students to arrange his work schedule Suggested revision: requires approved students to arrange their work schedules Why it matters: The plural subject needs the plural possessive pronoun and noun.
- 11. Name stage accurately Original: The report is the 4th step Suggested revision: Reports are the fourth stage Why it matters: The diagram labels this stage 'Reports' and formal prose should spell out the ordinal.
- 12. Specify weekly form Original: the report form Suggested revision: a weekly Report Form Why it matters: The diagram specifies that a Report Form is completed weekly and submitted every Friday.
Suggested Rewrites
- flow chart flowchart
- steps involved in gaining work experience before completing the graduation by university students the steps university students follow to complete a work-experience requirement before graduation
- to succeed in getting their first job Delete
- some university insists some universities insist
- awarded with credits awarded credits
- called Application called the Application stage
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response follows the process in a clear chronological sequence and covers nearly every stage, including the final award of credit. Its main task weakness is omitting the interview-arrangement step and adding an unsupported claim about obtaining a first job, while frequent agreement and pronoun errors reduce grammatical control. Prioritise complete fidelity to every box in the diagram, then proofread subject-verb agreement and singular-plural references.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The main sequence and requirements are reported accurately, but the response omits arranging interviews and introduces an unsupported purpose about securing a first job.
Include every action in the application box and remove any purpose or detail not shown in the flowchart.
Coherence and Cohesion
Stage-by-stage sequencing creates clear progression, although one long paragraph and repetitive stage labels limit structural sophistication.
Place the introduction and overview in one paragraph, then group the six stages into two logically balanced detail paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient range of process vocabulary, but several word choices and collocations are awkward or imprecise.
Use natural process phrasing such as complete a degree, receive credits, and submit a report rather than forced alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex forms are attempted and meaning remains clear, but agreement, pronoun, article, and verb-pattern errors occur repeatedly.
Maintain singular reference to a student throughout and check each following verb and possessive form for agreement.