The bar chart shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second years of use.
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The bar chart comparescompare the number of visits each month to a community website in the first and second years of operation.
Overall, the number of visits in the second year was much higher than that in the first yearthan the first year in almost every month, with August being the only exception. Both years showed a similar pattern, with visitorvisitors numbers rising through late autumn, dipping in late winterdipping late spring and early summer, and recovering through spring and summerrecovering toward summer.
Visits in the first and second yearsyear increased from around 2,000 and 3,000 in September to 10,000 and 17,000 in both November and December, respectively. The first-year visits then declined to approximately 4,0004000 in January and bottomed out at about 1,000 in February1000 in February and March, whileMarch while the second-year visits reached theirits lowest level of 10,000 in February10000 in February and March.
Website traffic rebounded for both years from April. Following a continuous increaseFellowing a continuously increase, first-year visitsvisits of the first year began with close to 5,000 in April and peaked at just below 15,000 in August. Meanwhile, the figure for the second yearfor second year rose from around 12,500 in April to 22,500 in both June and July, before declining rapidly to roughly 12,500declining rapidly to 13,000 in August, making August the sole exception where the first year of use exceeded the second year of usefirst year of uses exceeded second year of uses.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report effectively describes and compares the key trends across both years, supported by a clear overview and accurate data points from the chart. Its main limitations lie in grammatical inaccuracies and occasional word-form errors that slightly reduce language precision. To improve further, focus on subject-verb agreement and refining complex prepositional phrases.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview is clear and the key features are accurately highlighted and compared with relevant data support.
Ensure all minor data references are framed precisely to maintain complete accuracy across all months.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically structured into clear paragraphs with good progression throughout the response.
Use a wider variety of cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly between sentences without relying on repetitive temporal markers.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a varied range of topic vocabulary appropriate for describing trends, though some word form errors occur.
Review word formation and collocations to eliminate inaccurate phrasing such as continuous adjectives used before verbs.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of sentence structures is used, though minor grammatical errors in subject-verb agreement and plurals are present.
Check subject-verb agreement and pronoun references carefully during editing to increase grammatical accuracy.