The graph and the pie chart below give information on in-house training courses in a large financial company.
Sample Response
The pie chart shows the yearly duration of four types of in-house professional trainingfour different in-house professional training sessions in a large company while the bar graph outlines what managers and secretaries think about the trainingthink about it. Overall, technical training takes more time than the other types of trainingthe duration of technical training is higher than other types of training and most of the managers and secretaries of this company believeopine that these training sessions are important for their jobsjob. According to the illustration, the yearly duration of technical training is 30 hours, which30 hours which is exactly double that of career development and triple that of interpersonal skills trainingdouble and treble than that of career and interpersonal skills development training. Health-and-safety-relatedHealth and safety related sessions have the shortestleast duration, 5 hours per year to be precise. The bar graph reveals that more than 80% of secretariesmore than 80% secretaries and roughly 77% of managersroughly 77% managers find these training sessions helpful for their jobs. About one in ten people in each groupOne out of ten employees views the training negativelydoes not take it positively as they think it is a waste of valuable timekills their time. Half of the managers and over 40% secretaries consider the training as an opportunity to expandexpanding their network. Finally, more than six out of ten in both groupsmore than 6 out of ten also feel that these training sessions provide a good excusebring good excuses for a change.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear overview and accurately selects nearly all key figures and comparisons from both visuals, especially the relative training durations and the contrasting staff attitudes. Its main limitation is language control: several comparisons and collocations are awkward, and the single-block presentation reduces structural clarity. Prioritise more natural comparative phrasing, accurate verb patterns, and clear paragraphing between the overview and supporting details.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and accurate coverage of the four training durations and the main attitude comparisons fulfil the task strongly.
Report the roughly ten-percent waste-of-time figures separately for managers and secretaries rather than merging them as employees.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves logically from the overview to training hours and then staff attitudes, with clear basic linking.
Separate the overview and the two visual-detail sections into distinct paragraphs to make the structure more immediately visible.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied enough to describe proportions and attitudes, but several choices such as 'opine' and 'bring good excuses' sound unnatural.
Use standard chart-reporting collocations such as 'believe', 'regard training as', and 'provide a welcome change'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A useful range of sentence structures is attempted, although errors in comparison forms and verb patterns recur.
Correct structures such as 'three times as long as' and 'an opportunity to expand' while checking agreement and reference.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph and the pie chart below give information on in-house training courses in a large financial company.
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