The charts below show the proportions of world forests and timber across five different regions.
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The pie charts present the percentages of world forests and timber in five different regions.
Overall, Africa accounted for the highest proportiontook the highest proportion of world forests while accounting for the least share of timber across five different regions. All the numbers of the percentage of world forests were larger than the numbers of the proportions of timber in each of the other four regionsthe each other four regions.
In detail, theThe percentage of world forest in Africa was the largestwas largest among the five regions,among five regions, reaching 27%. However, this figure became the smallest one when it came to the percentagepercertage of timber, only accounting for 9% of the total, and this was also the largest negative difference. South America hadhas the largest positivepositeve difference between those two proportions, with its share making up 16% and 23% respectively.
The differences between these two figures in the other three regions wereThe difference of those two figures in other three regions were much smaller, at least less than 5%. North America accounted for 25% of total forest and 30% of total timber. Europe was the next largest,Europe followed closely, with its shares of 18% and 20% respectively, which was also the smallest differencedifferece among the five regions.among five regions. Asia had the smallest share of total forestsleast share of total forest, standing atarriving to 14%, while accounting for 18% of total timber.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response effectively highlights all key numerical data and comparisons across the five regions. However, the overview contains a factual contradiction regarding whether timber or forest proportions were larger in the other four regions. To improve, ensure summary statements accurately mirror the visual trends and carefully check for minor spelling mistakes.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key details and comparisons are fully reported, but the overview misstates the trend for the four non-African regions by reversing forest and timber proportions.
Verify overview trends against the chart data to ensure that summary statements accurately state which category is higher.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically grouped into paragraphs with clear topic focus, though some transition phrasing feels slightly repetitive or awkward.
Refine cohesive expressions like 'in the each other four regions' to create smoother, more natural paragraph connections.
Lexical Resource
A good variety of proportional vocabulary is used, though spelling mistakes such as 'percertage' and 'positeve' are present.
Proofread carefully to eliminate typographical and spelling errors in key description words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of sentence structures are attempted with generally clear meaning, though minor errors in punctuation and preposition choice occur.
Ensure correct capitalization after introductory phrases and correct prepositional pairings such as 'arriving at' instead of 'arriving to'.