The chart below shows the type of transports young people in four countries prefer to use.
Sample Response
The bar graph outlines the modes of transporttypes of transportation young peoplethe young generation in GreatGrain Britain, the USAUSA, Germany and France prefer to use to commute. Overall, automobiles are the most preferred vehicles for commuting in these countries among young peopleamong the youths except for Germany, whereGermany where the highest proportion of youths prefer to travel by bicycleby their bicycles. The illustration shows that three-quarters of French youths use a car while a few of them prefer two-wheelers, which accounts for nearly 15% of them. The majority of young Americans choose an automobile for commuting whereas half of these young people travel by motorbike. In Great Britain, under 30% of youngsters travel by bicycle and twice this proportiondouble of this proportion travel by cartravel through on autos. Furthermore, the preferences of young Germanspreference of the German youngs is very different from those in the other countriesdifferent from those of others, as more young people like to travel by bicycletravel using a bicycle (about 45%) instead of a car (40%). The percentage of young motorcyclists is the same for France and Great Britain (exactly 10%) while this ratio is slightly higher in Germanyfor Germans, at around 15%which is around 15%. Delete[Writen by Varsha]
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response provides a clear overview and covers all four countries with several useful cross-country comparisons. Its main limitation is data accuracy, most notably describing half of young Americans as motorcycle users when the chart shows 30%, while frequent awkward expressions reduce precision; prioritise checking each percentage against the chart and using straightforward labels such as young people, car users, and bicycle users.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview is accurate and most country comparisons reflect the chart, but the US motorcycle figure is materially misstated and the French two-wheeler reference is vague.
Report each transport mode explicitly and correct the US comparison to 60% for cars, 30% for motorcycles, and 10% for bicycles.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves coherently across the four countries, but the absence of paragraphing and some imprecise referencing weaken the organisation.
Place the overview in its own paragraph and group Great Britain with the USA, then Germany with France, to sharpen comparisons.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate range in transport and comparison vocabulary, but frequent unnatural forms and a spelling error reduce precision.
Replace expressions such as the German youngs and travel through on autos with young Germans and travel by car, and correct Great Britain.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex sentences, but errors in agreement, reference, articles, and comparative phrasing recur.
Check that pronouns refer clearly to percentages or people and form comparisons with structures such as twice this proportion.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the type of transports young people in four countries prefer to use.
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