The chart below shows the type of transports young people in four countries prefer to use. Transport preferences among young people from different countries
Sample Response
The bar graph outlines the types of transportation the young generation in Grain Britain, USA, Germany and France prefer to use to commute. Overall, automobiles are the most preferred vehicles for commuting in these countries among the youths except for Germany where the highest proportion of youths prefer to travel by their bicycles. The illustration shows that three-quarters of French youths use a car while a few of them prefer two-wheelers, which accounts for nearly 15% of them. The majority of young Americans choose an automobile for commuting whereas half of these young people travel by motorbike. In Great Britain, under 30% of youngsters travel by bicycle and double of this proportion travel through on autos. Furthermore, the preference of the German youngs is very different from those of others, as more young people like to travel using a bicycle (about 45%) instead of a car (40%). The percentage of young motorcyclists is the same for France and Great Britain (exactly 10%) while this ratio is slightly higher for Germans, which is around 15%. [Writen by Varsha]
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use transport modes Original: types of transportation Suggested revision: modes of transport Why it matters: "Modes of transport" is the conventional phrase for the three categories.
- 2. Use young people Original: the young generation Suggested revision: young people Why it matters: "Young people" is more natural and directly matches the chart population.
- 3. Correct country name Original: Grain Suggested revision: Great Why it matters: The country name is misspelled.
- 4. Add article Original: USA Suggested revision: the USA Why it matters: The country abbreviation normally takes the definite article.
- 5. Avoid awkward plural Original: among the youths Suggested revision: among young people Why it matters: This is the more natural expression for the population shown.
- 6. Add comma Original: Germany where Suggested revision: Germany, where Why it matters: The non-defining clause after the country name requires a comma.
- 7. Fix transport phrase Original: by their bicycles Suggested revision: by bicycle Why it matters: The standard expression for a mode of transport is "by bicycle."
- 8. Use twice Original: double of this proportion Suggested revision: twice this proportion Why it matters: "Twice this proportion" is the correct comparative construction.
- 9. Use travel by car Original: travel through on autos Suggested revision: travel by car Why it matters: The original combination of prepositions and "autos" is unnatural.
- 10. Fix noun phrase Original: preference of the German youngs Suggested revision: preferences of young Germans Why it matters: The plural noun and demonym form are required.
- 11. Clarify comparison Original: different from those of others Suggested revision: different from those in the other countries Why it matters: This version clearly compares Germany's preferences with those in the other countries.
- 12. Use by bicycle Original: travel using a bicycle Suggested revision: travel by bicycle Why it matters: "By bicycle" is the standard prepositional phrase for the mode.
Suggested Rewrites
- types of transportation modes of transport
- the young generation young people
- Grain Great
- USA the USA
- among the youths among young people
- Germany where Germany, where
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response provides a clear overview and covers all four countries with several useful cross-country comparisons. Its main limitation is data accuracy, most notably describing half of young Americans as motorcycle users when the chart shows 30%, while frequent awkward expressions reduce precision; prioritise checking each percentage against the chart and using straightforward labels such as young people, car users, and bicycle users.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview is accurate and most country comparisons reflect the chart, but the US motorcycle figure is materially misstated and the French two-wheeler reference is vague.
Report each transport mode explicitly and correct the US comparison to 60% for cars, 30% for motorcycles, and 10% for bicycles.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves coherently across the four countries, but the absence of paragraphing and some imprecise referencing weaken the organisation.
Place the overview in its own paragraph and group Great Britain with the USA, then Germany with France, to sharpen comparisons.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate range in transport and comparison vocabulary, but frequent unnatural forms and a spelling error reduce precision.
Replace expressions such as the German youngs and travel through on autos with young Germans and travel by car, and correct Great Britain.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex sentences, but errors in agreement, reference, articles, and comparative phrasing recur.
Check that pronouns refer clearly to percentages or people and form comparisons with structures such as twice this proportion.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the type of transports young people in four countries prefer to use. Transport preferences among young people from different countries
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