The chart below shows the type of transports young people in four countries prefer to use.
Sample Response
The column graph outlines the transport preferencestransportation preference among young peopleamong the young people in Great Britain, the USAGreat Britain, USA, Germany and France. As an overall trend, young peoplethe young generation, except in Germany, mainly prefer carsmainly like to use the car as a meansmean of commuting and this proportion is highestthis ratio is the highest in France. To illustrate, six out of ten British young people favourBritish youth favour cars to travel. Less than one-third of them use bicycles and only one in ten young peopleone of ten youth in the UK choose motorcycles for commutingpick motorbike to commute. A similar ratio of US adolescents (preciselyprecise 60%) prefers cars but their preference for motorbikes is higher than that of the UK, 30% to be exact. However, a smaller percentageless percentage of American youngsters prefer bicyclesof American youngsters prefers riding bicycles, only one out of ten. Germany shows an interesting trend where almost half of the adolescents like to ride a bicycle, a trend uncommon in other countries. 40% of them choose cars as their transportation and the remaining 15% prefer motorcyclesthe rest of them inclined to use motorbikes. Finally, the highest percentage of young people who prefer cars is in Francecar-loving youngs are located in France, where three out of four adolescents prefer carsaround 2 out of 3 adolescent fancy cars over other vehicles. Around 15% of French young people use bicyclesAround 10% of French youth use bicycle and around 10% prefer motorcyclesa similar percentage ride on motorized bikes.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The report’s strongest feature is its accurate country-by-country coverage: it recognises cars as the leading choice outside Germany and reports nearly all proportions correctly. Minor numerical imprecision for France is outweighed by recurring awkward vocabulary and agreement errors, and the single-paragraph presentation weakens readability. The highest-priority improvement is to retain the accurate comparisons while using conventional statistical phrasing and clearer paragraphing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview captures the main cross-country pattern and almost all categories are accurately reported, with only minor imprecision in the French figures.
State France’s car share as about 75% and its bicycle share as about 15% to make the otherwise thorough coverage fully accurate.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from Great Britain through France and comparisons are easy to follow, but presenting everything in one paragraph reduces structural clarity.
Separate the overview from the details and group Great Britain with the USA before contrasting Germany and France.
Lexical Resource
The response uses varied transport and comparison vocabulary, but frequent nonstandard choices such as “a mean,” “less percentage,” and “car-loving youngs” weaken accuracy.
Replace improvised expressions with standard terms such as means of transport, a smaller proportion, and young people who prefer cars.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex comparisons are attempted and meaning is usually clear, but subject-verb agreement, articles, plurals, and verb forms are repeatedly inaccurate.
Check agreement after percentage expressions and plural subjects, especially in clauses using prefer, choose, and favour.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the type of transports young people in four countries prefer to use.
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