You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter, introduce yourself describe your plans for the party invite your neighbour to come
Sample Response
Dear Mr and Mrs Simpson, I am your next-door neighbour and we have recently moved into this house. I regret that I did not get the opportunity to be acquainted with you. In fact, we are a family of three - me, my wife and our 8 years old son. We are planning to hold a party next Monday and would like to invite you. My son’s birthday will be on next Monday. Hence, my spouse and I have decided to celebrate this special occasion and invite some friends and relatives. The party will commence at 7:00 pm and continue till midnight. It will consist of some music and dancing in which a local music band will perform. The dinner will be served at around 08:00 pm in the garden and the concert will be held afterwards. Although the participants are comparatively limited, we are afraid the noises from the music performance might disturb you. We apologize in advance for any inconvenience created by this. I initially intended to invite you and your family to the party over the phone, but I hesitated whether it could be a good idea or not. My wife suggested that it would be more appropriate if I write a letter to do so. We will be genuinely pleased if you kindly accept our invitation to our beloved son's birthday ceremony. This way, we will not only find the chance to become familiar but enjoy the occasion together. Best Regards, Ali Kazemian
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Greeting comma Original: Dear Mr and Mrs Simpson Suggested revision: Dear Mr and Mrs Simpson, Why it matters: Add a comma after the salutation.
- 2. Natural phrase Original: be acquainted with you Suggested revision: meet you properly Why it matters: This sounds more neighbourly.
- 3. Hyphenated adjective Original: our 8 years old son Suggested revision: our 8-year-old son Why it matters: Use singular hyphenated form before a noun.
- 4. Time expression Original: will be on next Monday Suggested revision: will be next Monday Why it matters: Do not use “on” here.
- 5. Natural word Original: spouse Suggested revision: wife Why it matters: This is warmer and simpler.
- 6. Natural verb Original: The party will commence Suggested revision: The party will start Why it matters: “Commence” is unnecessarily formal.
- 7. Formal phrase Original: continue till midnight Suggested revision: continue until midnight Why it matters: “Until” is more complete.
- 8. Article use Original: The dinner will be served Suggested revision: Dinner will be served Why it matters: No article is needed.
- 9. Time style Original: at around 08:00 pm Suggested revision: at around 8:00 pm Why it matters: Avoid the leading zero.
- 10. Natural phrase Original: participants are comparatively limited Suggested revision: the guest list is fairly small Why it matters: This is clearer.
- 11. Uncountable noun Original: the noises from the music performance Suggested revision: the noise from the music Why it matters: “Noise” is usually uncountable.
- 12. Collocation Original: inconvenience created by this Suggested revision: inconvenience caused by this Why it matters: Use “caused by”.
Suggested Rewrites
- Dear Mr and Mrs Simpson Dear Mr and Mrs Simpson,
- be acquainted with you meet you properly
- our 8 years old son our 8-year-old son
- will be on next Monday will be next Monday
- spouse wife
- The party will commence The party will start
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The letter introduces the family, describes the party, warns about possible noise and invites the neighbours.
Keep the relevant content, then revise the wording and organisation points highlighted in the essay comments.
Coherence and Cohesion
The order is logical, but the one-block format and phone-invitation detail weaken focus.
Use clearer paragraphing and smoother links so each bullet point is easy to follow.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is polite, though several phrases are too formal or unnatural for neighbours.
Prefer natural collocations and precise topic vocabulary over overformal or translated-sounding phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is generally clear, with article, word-form and conditional errors.
Proofread tense, articles, prepositions and sentence boundaries before submitting.