You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter: - explain why you would like the job - give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ - say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
Sample Response
Dear Mrs. Scott,
I am writing in response to the advertisement in the Australian magazine, inviting someone to live with your family for six months and care for your six-year-old child.
I hold a degree in educationEducation and have completed relevant courses in child development and first aid. My academic background, coupled with my practical experience in childcare, makes me a suitable candidatepositions me as a suitable candidate. I have previously volunteered at local daycare centersworked as a volunteer in local daycare centers, where I developed my ability to provideimproved my skills in providing a supportive and educational environment for young children.
During my free time in Australia, I plan to experienceexplore the local culture, visit museums, and attend community eventsengage in community events. I am also keen to participate inkeen on participating in outdoor activities and sports, fostering a healthy and active lifestyle.
Yours sincerelySincerely,
Anita
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter is clearly organised and uses confident, accurate language to present relevant qualifications and sensible plans for free time. Its main limitation is that it never explains why the writer personally wants the job, and the response is also below the required length. The highest priority is to add a developed reason for seeking this childcare position while retaining the concise, professional tone.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear, and the suitability and free-time points are developed, but the reason for wanting the job is omitted and the letter is under length.
Add a specific, developed explanation of why this particular childcare opportunity in Australia appeals to you.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged in focused paragraphs and progresses logically from purpose to qualifications and future plans.
Use a brief closing sentence to complete the progression from the main details to an expected response.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, with effective phrases for qualifications, childcare experience, and planned activities.
Make a few expressions more natural and direct, particularly the description of how your experience makes you suitable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of simple and complex structures is used with strong control and only very minor lapses.
Maintain this accuracy while adding the missing content, and use conventional lowercase styling in the closing phrase.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter:
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.