You have been working in a company for the last two years. Recently, your computer in the office has started giving some problems, and it is affecting your work performance. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - describe the problem - explain how it is affecting your work - write what you want him to do regarding it
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to you to express my concern about my computer problemconcern over the problem related to my computer, which has adversely affected my productivity; as a result,, due to which I have been unable to meet deadlinesI could not meet the deadlines.
Let me inform you that I have been working as a software engineer in your company for two years. I have been assigned a computerallotted my personal computer. Everything was going well. I was surprised whenI was taken aback that it stopped working. I tried to put it right, but without success, however, all in vain. I spentI had spent two consecutive days trying to repair it, but I could not fix itit could not be put right.
Furthermore, it has a negativebad impact on my productivity. Now, I have been delaying all my important meetings. Moreover, there are only two computers, which are already in use by other employeespersonal computers, which other employees have already used. Therefore, it will be a significantheavy loss as I have arrangeddone an important deal with anthe overseas client but must now wait and may lose this opportunitybut now have to wait or lose this opportunity. Furthermore, it has been increasingescalating my stress because I madeas I had made great efforts to make thethat meeting successful.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response clearly explains that the computer has stopped working and develops several consequences for productivity, meetings, and a client deal. However, it omits the required request for managerial action and ends without a closing, leaving the letter incomplete. The highest priority is to add a direct, specific request for repair or replacement, then finish with an appropriate closing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The computer problem and its effects are developed, but the required request for action is completely missing and the letter is unfinished.
Add a direct request asking the manager to arrange an urgent repair or provide a replacement computer.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves clearly from the fault to its consequences, though the progression becomes repetitive and lacks a concluding request paragraph.
Organise the letter into problem, impact, and requested solution paragraphs, ending with a concise closing.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary conveys the workplace problem and its consequences, but several word choices and collocations are awkward or inaccurate.
Use natural expressions such as “assigned a computer,” “missed deadlines,” “shared computers are occupied,” and “secure the client deal.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex forms are attempted and meaning remains clear, but tense control, clause structure, and punctuation are inconsistent.
Use consistent present or present-perfect forms for the continuing problem and split overloaded sentences into accurate clauses.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have been working in a company for the last two years. Recently, your computer in the office has started giving some problems, and it is affecting your work performance. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
- describe the problem
- explain how it is affecting your work
- write what you want him to do regarding it
Your response
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