You have been to a business meeting at another company and saw a piece of equipment which can be useful for your company too. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - describe the piece of equipment you have seen - why having the same equipment would be useful for your company - offer your assistance in buying the equipment
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writingwriting this letter to recommend a piece of equipment that I believe would be highly useful for our companyfor our company which I believe would be highly useful. I saw this equipment at another company when I attended a business meeting there about a week ago. This useful piece of equipment, I am talking about, is a foldable whiteboard. Of course, we already have a large whiteboard in our meeting roommeeting and conference room, but the problem with itproblem with this large whiteboard is that it is impracticalreally inconvenient to carry it to another room if we want to give an important presentationdo some important presentation there. Fortunately,But, luckily, this whiteboard would solve that problem for us since we can always fold it and carry it anywhere withat ease. Besides, this foldable whiteboard can be disassembled into sectionsbroken into pieces, like modularsome furniture, which wouldwill make it easy for us to place it on almost surfaces of various sizesany kind or size of surface. In addition, the foldable whiteboardAnd, this foldable whiteboard folds down to the size of an average-sized briefcasebecomes like an average size briefcase, about 24 inches long and 18 inches wide, when foldedafter folding it. So, if you think that this foldable whiteboard could be a useful piece of equipmenta piece of useful equipment for our office, I would be more than happy to help you purchase itassist you in buying it. Yours faithfully, Jack Nicholas
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter covers all three requirements with a clear purpose, useful dimensions, and a direct offer to help with the purchase. Its main limitation is repetitive expression and occasionally awkward descriptions of how the board folds, moves, and fits on surfaces, which reduce precision and flow. Prioritise grouping the ideas into distinct paragraphs and replacing repeated wording with concise, natural descriptions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The equipment is described in relevant detail, its practical benefit is explained, and assistance with buying it is explicitly offered.
Clarify exactly how the detachable parts help the company, since the claim about placing the board on surfaces is difficult to visualise.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter follows a logical sequence, but repeated nouns, sentence-opening connectors, and the single-block format make progression less polished.
Organise the description, benefits, and offer into separate paragraphs and vary how sentences connect.
Lexical Resource
The response uses sufficient topic-specific language, but frequent repetition of 'foldable whiteboard' and several awkward collocations limit flexibility.
Replace repeated wording and use natural phrases such as 'carry it with ease', 'give a presentation', and 'briefcase-sized'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are frequent and generally controlled, though some punctuation, article, and clause choices are awkward.
Remove unnecessary commas and refine constructions such as 'the equipment I am referring to' and 'an average-sized briefcase'.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have been to a business meeting at another company and saw a piece of equipment which can be useful for your company too. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
- describe the piece of equipment you have seen
- why having the same equipment would be useful for your company
- offer your assistance in buying the equipment
Your response
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