You forget your bag in the gym and the gym management announced that it will be closed for a week for some renovation work. You need your bag as it has important things in it. Write a letter to the manager of the gym. In your letter: - introduce yourself and describe your position - give them a description of your bag - tell them what you want them to do
Sample Response
Dear Mr Andrew, I am a regular member of the West Delhi branch of True Fitness Gymyour True Fitness Gym in the West Delhi branch. I went to the gym last Friday, as usual, however, I was in a bit hurry for an official meeting and I forgot my bag in cupboard 167. Today I learned that the gymgymnasium will be closed for a week, but I needa week but I need the bag urgently. I hope that you can arrangeI am hoping that you would arrange a way to return the bag to mehand over the bag to me. My access card number is 99876 and I have been a member since the beginning of 2021. The gym managementThe authority has announced that the gym will be closed for renovation work but I need my bag along with its contentscontent urgently. My bag is black and has three zippers, one in the middle and two on the sides. It has my workofficial laptop and wallet containingwallet which includes my driving licencelicense and credit cards along with some cash. I need these itemsI would need them before I leave for workgo to the office tomorrow morning. I would be grateful if you could askI would request you to kindly instruct a staff memberyour ward boy to help me retrieveassist me in getting the bag from the cupboard when I visit the gymwhen I come to the gym tomorrow morning. I understand the inconvenience this request may causeinconvenience this might cause you, and I would really appreciate your help. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Gaurav Verma
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter communicates the urgent request effectively, gives precise identifying details, and maintains a suitably polite formal tone. Its main limitation is some repetition of the closure and urgency, together with a few unnatural expressions and article choices. The highest priority is to condense repeated information and refine collocations so that the request sounds more fluent and professionally phrased.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response fully explains the writer's position, identifies the bag and its contents, and makes a clear, appropriately polite request.
Refine the request by specifying a contact or confirmation arrangement for collecting the bag without repeating the urgency.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the situation to identification, description, and requested action, though some details are unnecessarily repeated.
Remove the second explanation that the gym is closing and begin a new paragraph when moving from identification to the bag description.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied and precise for the situation, but phrases such as 'in a bit hurry' and 'along with its content' are unnatural.
Use more natural collocations, for example 'in a bit of a hurry' and 'the bag and its contents.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a range of sentence structures with generally good control, despite occasional article, punctuation, and agreement errors.
Review article use and sentence boundaries, especially around 'however,' and ensure plural nouns agree with their possessives and verbs.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You forget your bag in the gym and the gym management announced that it will be closed for a week for some renovation work. You need your bag as it has important things in it. Write a letter to the manager of the gym. In your letter:
- introduce yourself and describe your position
- give them a description of your bag
- tell them what you want them to do
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