You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: - explain why you changed jobs - describe your new job - tell him/her your other news

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Sample Response

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Dear Angela, I hope you and your family are doing fine, and I’m sorry I haven’t been in touch with you recently. I’m writing to let you know that I've resigned from my previous company and takentook a new job recently. Do you remember that I was working for a consultancy firm, and I told you how eager I was to change jobshow much I was looking forward to changing my job? Well, II've joined a travel agency last month, and the new job is exciting. In my previous job, I was working really long hours and, to be honest, the pay wasn’t great. SoSo basically I applied for a job at a new company that was looking for people who were enthusiastic about taking on challenges and interested in travellingpeople enthusiastic about taking on challenges and are interested in travelling. I thought it wasis a good fit for what I wantedfor my expectation and accepted the offertook the opportunity. I was a bit nervous in the interview, but in the end, I got the job as a senior travel consultant. The salaryremuneration in the new job is better; the working conditionsbetter, the working conditions are great, and I don’tgreat and I don’t have to work long hours anymore. On top of that, they offerBesides, they offer performance bonuses, and I'll be able to travelI would be able to travel to different places and explore new destinationsdifferent places and explore many places! I've also enrolled in a diploma course at the University of Edinburgh and started a new travel blog. My parents have come to visitmeet me this week, and I have plansI've plans to show them aroundtake them to show them around.

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Take care. With love, Emma

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter is engaging and fully covers the reasons for leaving, the benefits and responsibilities of the new role, and several pieces of personal news in a suitably friendly tone. Its main limitation is recurring tense and agreement inconsistency, alongside some repetition about travel; the priority is to organise the three bullet points into distinct paragraphs and edit the account into consistent past and present-perfect forms.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

The response fully develops all three bullet points with convincing reasons for the change, substantial new-job detail, and relevant personal updates in a friendly register.

Next step

Refine the new-job description by briefly stating the main duties of a senior travel consultant as well as its benefits.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

The conversational progression is easy to follow and the ideas are logically sequenced, though the long central block and repeated travel references weaken grouping.

Next step

Divide the letter into paragraphs for the job change, the new position, and other news, and combine overlapping points about travelling.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

The response uses a flexible range suited to an informal update, with occasional awkward combinations such as good fit for my expectation and explore many places.

Next step

Use natural forms such as matched my expectations, opportunities to travel, and show my parents around.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Scoring rule

A broad range of structures is attempted successfully, but tense, agreement, and auxiliary errors recur in otherwise clear sentences.

Next step

Correct time-linked forms such as joined last month, thought it was, people who are interested, and I have plans.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter:

- explain why you changed jobs

- describe your new job

- tell him/her your other news

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