Modern communication systems benefit many people yet there are some that oppose to them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement.
Sample Response
Contemporary communication tools yield positive results for their usersconsumers but many peoplea host of people reject this viewrefute this statement. While it is observed a sizeable minority of negative attitude toward consequences of communication devices, I believe that these technologiesfacilities such as TV, the Internet, computers, smart phones etc. play an indispensable role in our life.
Mass communication provides several important servicesbears a plethora of significant outcomes that include mass media, mobile phones and the World Wide Webmass media, mobile, World Wide Web. First of all, a substantial majority of TV channels are producing various learning programs which their contents contain educating the public. As a prime example, many television channelstremendous televisions have explainedillustrated driving rules via animation and short movies. Furthermore, TV and radio entertain an overwhelming number of individuals every dayin every day. In addition, audiences can obtain useful informationgrasp beneficial information in a wide range of fields. Most importantly, we can considerably reducedecline our costs and avoid wasting our time by using online services and television newsusing services of websites and TV news.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response establishes a clear favourable position and provides several relevant benefits of modern communication systems. However, at only 152 words, it is substantially underdeveloped, lacks a conclusion, and relies on a list of loosely explained claims expressed through frequent awkward collocations. The highest-priority improvement is to complete a full essay with developed examples, a concluding restatement, and more natural word combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position and relevant benefits are presented, but the response is substantially under length and its ideas receive limited development.
Write at least 250 words, develop two central reasons with specific explanation or examples, and add a conclusion that confirms the position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a discernible introduction and body, but the body becomes a mechanically linked list and the essay ends without a conclusion.
Organise the benefits into focused paragraphs whose supporting sentences clearly develop one controlling idea at a time.
Lexical Resource
The writer attempts a reasonably varied vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and exaggerated word choices reduce precision.
Prioritise natural phrases such as reduce costs, educational programmes, and many television channels over unnecessarily elaborate alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Several sentence forms are attempted and meaning remains generally clear, though errors in clause structure, articles, and word forms occur frequently.
Practise building accurate complex sentences with relative clauses and check article, plural, and preposition choices systematically.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Modern communication systems benefit many people yet there are some that oppose to them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement.
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