Modern communication systems benefit many people yet there are some that oppose to them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement.
Sample Response
Contemporary communication tools provide benefitsyield positive results for their usersconsumers but many peoplea host of people reject this viewrefute this statement. While it is observed a sizeable minority of negative attitude toward consequences of communication devices, I believe that these facilities such as TV, the Internet, computers, smart phones etc. play an indispensable role in our life.
Modern communication technologiesMass communication has numerous significant benefitsbears a plethora of significant outcomes including mass media, mobile phones and the World Wide Webthat include mass media, mobile, World Wide Web. First of all, a substantial majority of TV channels are producing various learning programs whose content educates the publicwhich their contents contain educating the public. As a prime example, many television channelstremendous televisions have explainedillustrated driving rules via animation and short movies. Furthermore, TV and radio entertain an overwhelming number of individuals every dayin every day. In addition, audiences can gain useful informationaudiences can grasp beneficial information in a wide range of fields. Most importantly, we can considerably decline our costs and avoid wasting our time by using services of websites and TV news.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear positive position and lists several relevant benefits of modern communication, with a basic progression from education to entertainment and convenience. Its main limitation is severe underdevelopment: at 152 words, it offers only one body paragraph, gives limited support, and has no concluding synthesis. The highest-priority improvement is to complete a full essay with developed examples and a concise conclusion, then correct recurring grammatical and collocational errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position and several relevant benefits are presented, but the response is far below the required length and the ideas remain insufficiently developed.
Add another fully developed body paragraph and a conclusion, using specific evidence to explain how communication systems benefit people.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and body paragraph follow a basic logical direction, but the sequence becomes a mechanical list and the response lacks a complete essay progression.
Group related benefits into distinct paragraphs with clear topic sentences, explanation, and a concluding link to the position.
Lexical Resource
The writer attempts a broad vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices make many statements awkward and occasionally unclear.
Prioritize accurate common expressions such as reduce costs, every day, and online services instead of forcing imprecise high-level vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex forms are attempted, but frequent errors in clause structure, articles, agreement, and noun phrases limit grammatical control.
Build accurate subject-verb-clause patterns first and check every relative clause and article before adding further complexity.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Modern communication systems benefit many people yet there are some that oppose to them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement.
Your response
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