Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for poverty? What can we do to help the poor?
Sample Response
There has been a dramatic increase in poverty in some developing and underdeveloped countries over the last few years. This has affected large numbers of people and worsened their hardshiphiked up their woes. Illiteracy, unemployment, inflation and unstable economic conditions are a few factorsare few factors that have contributed immensely to poverty. However, people’s suffering could be mitigated by providing them with health care, education and job opportunitiesproviding them health, education and job opportunities.
It is often seen that people are reluctant to send their children to educational institutions in poor countries. These institutions could help them in educating and changing their destiny. Despite the benefits of educationDespite its benefits, some parents choose to involvepeople would like to indulge their children in paid worktheir children in some paid work, which does not significantly helpwhich could not help significantly in altering their current circumstancespresent conditions. Furthermore, due to the country's economic uncertaintyuncertain circumstances of the country, there is increases in the prices ofa price hike of various basicbasics items that are essentialmandatory for daily life. Exorbitant prices of others goods and transportation also badly affected people financial matters. The government can play a pivotal role in eradicatingpivotal role to eradicate poverty from society. There should be attempts by the government to provide vocational training to poor people. That will enable them to find a good job based on their skills. Moreover, there should be free education for poor peoplepeoples; these people should be awarded a scholarship for higher studies based on their strong academic performancelofty performances. To sum up, I would like to say that government should take preemptive measures to reduce poverty by giving them professional training and educational facilities. The state could also provide financial support to poor familiessupport financially to poor families if there is no one to provide basic amenities of life to them. It is also the government's dutygovernment duty to ensure that hapless people should not be deprived of basic necessitiesdeprived off from basic life necessities.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies several plausible causes of poverty and offers practical measures such as vocational training, free education, scholarships, and direct support. Its main limitation is uneven development and organisation: causes and solutions are compressed into one long paragraph, and some points are listed or repeated rather than explained. The highest-priority improvement is to separate causes from solutions and develop each main idea with a precise cause-and-effect explanation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are answered with relevant causes and practical solutions, but several points are listed briefly and the discussion becomes repetitive.
Choose two principal causes and two corresponding solutions, then explain how each one creates or reduces poverty.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a discernible progression from causes to government action, but the oversized body paragraph combines too many functions and weakens clarity.
Use separate body paragraphs for causes and solutions, each beginning with a clear controlling idea.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range of topic vocabulary, but frequent awkward collocations and incorrect word forms reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace phrases such as 'hiked up their woes', 'basic items', and 'lofty performances' with simpler, more idiomatic alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex structures convey the main ideas, although recurring errors with articles, plurals, possessives, and prepositions are noticeable throughout.
Proofread noun phrases and prepositions, especially forms such as 'poor people', 'people's finances', and 'deprived of basic necessities'.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for poverty? What can we do to help the poor?
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