Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why?
Sample Response
"The only thing that doesn't change in life, is the change itself," a famous quote by an anonymous. It presents a notion that life contains dynamic values. The whole universe continues growth till this second. Thus changing is part of intrinsic life's property.
Humans are ageing constantly and another possession that every single man must deal with. Physical ought to follow life circle that constantly changing over time. There is no actual steady mode existed in the materialistic world. And the same goes to psychological activities. Man need to grow in order to gain a better stage in life. We need to indulge in an everlasting study to gain maturity. Knowledge which can be sought from informal media is a thing one must always occupy throughout their life. Without the urge to be in continuous development, humans might literally death. Climate changing, to name a few, is the environmental changing which alters the way we live. We are forced to adapt fast to the situation and carried out some anticipation. We need to stop cutting down forest brutally, stop exploiting our natural resources, must take care our sewage carefully, etc.; in order to inhibit the progression from getting worse.
In another word, changing is a natural pattern that we need to engage with an open heart. Even dramatic changes in life must be seen with different angles to grasp the value beneath it. When we almost sink down by the lack of fossil fuels, for instance, it had successfully delivered us the birth of bio-fossil that might do wonder for the coming existence of earth itself. When we restrict ourselves from following the trend and get along with the changing, for better or worse, we might beat down by our own reluctance and might wake up knowing that we are isolated in our own autistic world.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Complete the sentence Original: a famous quote by an anonymous Suggested revision: is a famous anonymous quotation Why it matters: The original phrase lacks a main verb and uses anonymous incorrectly as a noun.
- 2. Use natural phrasing Original: It presents a notion that Suggested revision: It conveys the idea that Why it matters: Conveys the idea is the natural collocation for expressing a quotation's meaning.
- 3. State the meaning clearly Original: contains dynamic values Suggested revision: is constantly changing Why it matters: The original collocation does not clearly express the intended idea of continual change.
- 4. Use the verb form Original: continues growth Suggested revision: continues to grow Why it matters: Continue takes an infinitive or gerund rather than the noun growth here.
- 5. Use natural time phrase Original: till this second Suggested revision: to this day Why it matters: To this day expresses ongoing change more naturally.
- 6. Use the noun change Original: Thus changing Suggested revision: Thus, change Why it matters: The sentence requires the noun change as its subject and a comma after the connector.
- 7. Fix noun phrase Original: intrinsic life's property Suggested revision: an intrinsic property of life Why it matters: The article and of-phrase create the correct noun structure.
- 8. Fix subject agreement Original: Man Suggested revision: People Why it matters: The plural subject people agrees with need and avoids the generic singular man.
- 9. Use learning collocation Original: indulge in an everlasting study Suggested revision: engage in lifelong learning Why it matters: Engage in lifelong learning is the natural expression for continuous study.
- 10. Use the verb die Original: death Suggested revision: die Why it matters: The modal might must be followed by the base-form verb die.
- 11. Use the established term Original: changing Suggested revision: change Why it matters: Climate change is the standard noun phrase.
- 12. Use the noun change Original: the environmental changing Suggested revision: an environmental change Why it matters: Changing is not a countable noun in this structure, and the example requires an.
Suggested Rewrites
- a famous quote by an anonymous is a famous anonymous quotation
- It presents a notion that It conveys the idea that
- contains dynamic values is constantly changing
- continues growth continues to grow
- till this second to this day
- Thus changing Thus, change
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response shows ambition in its vocabulary and presents a sustained preference for accepting change, supported by several attempts at explanation. However, it largely omits the requested comparison with people who prefer stability, and its examples drift into environmental issues while frequent language errors blur the reasoning. The highest priority is to plan a direct comparison of both approaches, state a personal preference explicitly, and support that choice with relevant life-based examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response argues in favour of change, but it does not adequately compare the contrasting approach and its preference is only implied.
Address both lifestyles directly, state which one you prefer, and explain that choice with relevant personal or social examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and some linking language provide a basic progression, though the argument wanders and several connections between ideas are unclear.
Give each paragraph one clear function: compare the two approaches, explain your preference, then support it with a focused example.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a broad range of vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate word choices and collocations make several ideas difficult to interpret.
Use familiar words accurately and check collocations such as life cycle, climate change, adapt to change, and continuous development.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and clause construction sometimes impede understanding.
Build accurate subject-verb clauses first, then combine them with controlled conjunctions and relative clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why?
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