Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why?
Sample Response
Some people love changes and doing new things whereas the others are keen on to have steady life, and they would not like to have new habits. As for me, I am fond of trying new things, I am an open-minded person and social in nature.
Many people do not like changes because many of them are closed-minded and antisocial. To come up with modern life, like Technology or to try new things is tough for them. For instance, one of my friends, his name is Mehmet, is a closed-minded. He played a game name is FM, but he was playing the oldest version of the game. when I said that ''are you still enjoying playing this version! I think, you should update it.'', he replied that '' I like doing the same thing. I hate changing anything in my life even if it is just a game.'', but I was determined to convince him to try the latest version of the game. As a result, I managed it. He tried and said that ''you are right, it is more enjoyable than the older one.''
However, some people are courageous to change their life. They are not afraid of trying something which they have not tried before. For example, I had been doing buddy building in my University years. I was bored to do it. Therefore, I decided to switch my sports habit. Hence, I embarked on swimming. After a while, I found out that the decision was right, and useful for me. If I did not change my sports habit. I would give up doing sport completely.
In conclusion, life is changing constantly in this modern world. You should come up with these changes ıf you would like to be a successful person in your life. Furthermore, you should not forget that some new things maybe useful for you. In addition, it is probably that you can enjoy doing them.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use change as uncountable Original: changes Suggested revision: change Why it matters: 'Change' is uncountable when referring generally to new circumstances.
- 2. Remove the unnecessary article Original: the others Suggested revision: others Why it matters: 'Others' already functions as a pronoun and does not take 'the' here.
- 3. Use the gerund pattern Original: keen on to Suggested revision: keen to Why it matters: The adjective can take the infinitive pattern 'keen to', without the preposition 'on'.
- 4. Add the article Original: have steady life Suggested revision: have a stable life Why it matters: The singular countable noun requires an article, and 'stable' is the natural adjective.
- 5. Clarify resistance to change Original: would not like to have new habits Suggested revision: would prefer not to change their habits Why it matters: The revision states naturally that these people want to preserve existing habits.
- 6. Use the past participle Original: a game name is FM Suggested revision: a game named FM Why it matters: The reduced relative clause requires the participle 'named'.
- 7. Use an intransitive success verb Original: I managed it Suggested revision: I succeeded Why it matters: 'Managed it' is vague, while 'succeeded' clearly refers to persuading the friend.
- 8. Use plural agreement Original: courageous to change their life Suggested revision: courageous enough to change their lives Why it matters: The plural subject requires 'lives', and 'enough to' completes the adjective construction naturally.
- 9. Use the defining pronoun Original: which Suggested revision: that Why it matters: 'That' is the natural defining relative pronoun after 'something'.
- 10. Correct the activity name Original: buddy building Suggested revision: bodybuilding Why it matters: The sport is called 'bodybuilding'.
- 11. Use a natural time phrase Original: in my University years Suggested revision: during my university years Why it matters: 'During' introduces the period, and the common noun 'university' is lowercase.
- 12. Use the correct preposition Original: bored to do it Suggested revision: bored with it Why it matters: The adjective 'bored' takes 'with' for an activity or object.
Suggested Rewrites
- changes change
- the others others
- keen on to keen to
- have steady life have a stable life
- would not like to have new habits would prefer not to change their habits
- a game name is FM a game named FM
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response clearly prefers change and uses personal examples to contrast habitual behaviour with trying new experiences. Its main limitation is that the comparison stereotypes people who prefer stability and provides little fair analysis of that approach, while frequent language errors disrupt clarity; the priority is to present genuine advantages and drawbacks of both lifestyles before using the swimming example to justify the final preference.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both approaches and a clear preference are present, with relevant examples, but the stable-life perspective is treated narrowly and unfairly.
Explain legitimate benefits of stability, such as security and expertise, then compare them directly with the adaptability gained through change.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and basic signposting create a clear overall sequence, although the lengthy dialogue and some abrupt shifts weaken progression.
Summarise the friend’s example in two sentences and make each paragraph’s comparison with the alternative approach explicit.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss habits and new experiences, but frequent inaccurate word choices and collocations limit control.
Use natural phrases such as prefer a stable life, keep up with modern life, updated version, bodybuilding, and take up swimming.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are attempted, but frequent errors in sentence boundaries, verb patterns, articles, conditionals, and capitalisation reduce clarity.
Write complete sentences with controlled verb complements and practise the third conditional before combining clauses into longer examples.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why?
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