Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why?
Sample Response
Some People are adventurous so they prefer to grab new opportunities, while others like to stay with their past but my inclination is towards the former group. In this essay, I am going to discuss the both ways of life and then give my own opinion on the matter. On the one hand, there are some merits and demerits for people who like to stay with their ancestral attitudes or status. The most vital points which can be cited first regarding this is that they do not want to leave their safe and secure places by any chance. Though like is boring sometimes but they find their happiness in the secure and familiar places. These types of peoples do not want to explore other planets like Mars, Venus or Neptune; this way of living is not helpful for any positive advancement of society. On the other hand, there are some peoples who are adventurous and they try to embrace something new. Firstly they believe that life is like a journey so you need to adapt yourselves to the changes. Otherwise, you will be in a backward period and you have to stay alone in a society. These categorised peoples are helpful for new inventions and also cause of the advancement of society. For instance, our ancient people had left their tomb and embark new way of life as a result, they invented fire and other amenities of ancient life. In my opinion, I enjoy the approaches how life is becoming new with new inventions or experienced new opportunities. I believe, if I get together with my old habits, it will give me tranquillity of life. But after sometimes it makes me bored and inactive. So I am very eager to experience new places and new cultures. By the way, I can feel myself and enjoy my times with the new opportunities.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix capitalisation Original: People Suggested revision: people Why it matters: People is a common noun and should not be capitalised mid-sentence.
- 2. Clarify the meaning Original: stay with their past Suggested revision: stick to their familiar routines Why it matters: The revision clearly expresses the intended preference for unchanged habits.
- 3. Remove the article Original: the both ways Suggested revision: both ways Why it matters: Both does not take the definite article in this structure.
- 4. Use precise terms Original: ancestral attitudes or status Suggested revision: traditional attitudes or lifestyles Why it matters: The original nouns do not clearly describe a preference for an unchanged way of life.
- 5. Fix clause agreement Original: The most vital points which can be cited first regarding this is Suggested revision: The most important point is Why it matters: The revision removes an unnecessary relative clause and restores singular agreement.
- 6. Repair contrast clause Original: Though like is boring sometimes but Suggested revision: Although life is sometimes boring, Why it matters: This corrects the word error and avoids combining though with but.
- 7. Use uncountable people Original: peoples Suggested revision: people Why it matters: People is already plural in this context and does not take an s.
- 8. Fix plural noun Original: peoples Suggested revision: people Why it matters: People is the correct plural form when referring to individuals generally.
- 9. Add introductory comma Original: Firstly they believe Suggested revision: Firstly, they believe Why it matters: An introductory linking adverb should be followed by a comma.
- 10. Match the pronoun Original: yourselves Suggested revision: yourself Why it matters: The generic singular you requires the singular reflexive pronoun yourself.
- 11. Use natural phrasing Original: in a backward period Suggested revision: left behind Why it matters: Left behind naturally conveys failure to keep pace with change.
- 12. Clarify social isolation Original: stay alone in a society Suggested revision: be isolated in society Why it matters: The revised collocation expresses the intended social consequence clearly.
Suggested Rewrites
- People people
- stay with their past stick to their familiar routines
- the both ways both ways
- ancestral attitudes or status traditional attitudes or lifestyles
- The most vital points which can be cited first regarding this is The most important point is
- Though like is boring sometimes but Although life is sometimes boring,
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response's strongest feature is its clear preference for change and its attempt to discuss both approaches before explaining that choice. Its main limitation is that several ideas are exaggerated, loosely relevant, or insufficiently developed, and frequent language errors make the reasoning less precise. The highest-priority improvement is to use realistic, directly relevant examples and develop each comparison through clear explanations expressed in more accurate sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both approaches and the writer's preference are covered, but the comparison is uneven and some supporting ideas are implausible or only loosely relevant.
Explain realistic personal and social consequences of each approach and connect every example directly to the comparison.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a discernible sequence and basic signposting, although cohesion is mechanical and the absence of paragraph breaks weakens progression.
Organise the comparison, contrasting approach, and personal preference into separate paragraphs with clearer links between claims and examples.
Lexical Resource
The writer attempts a reasonably varied vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate word choices and collocations often make expression awkward.
Choose simpler, natural phrases for familiar habits, adaptation, and new experiences rather than forcing imprecise formal vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction limit accuracy.
Build accurate simple and compound sentences first, then add controlled subordinate clauses with consistent subject-verb agreement and tense.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why?
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