Some people say domestic animals, like cats, should not be reared in cities. Others say that such companion animals are beneficial to the community of a city. Which attitude do you believe to be correct?
Sample Response
Throughout human historyFrom the very beginning of the human era, people can’t live without a companion. SometimesAnd sometimes it is seen that pets can be the best companions for many people. People often betray othersbetray with others, but pets are often loyal to their ownerspets are always loyal to the master. Though rearing domestic animals hasrearing some domestic animals have some negative impacts on citiesnegative impact in cities, in my viewbut in my view, such companion animals are beneficial to the community. I am giving some reasons for my viewsome reason on my side.
First of all, they often help people to reducelessen their loneliness and become good companionsbecome a good companion. Sometimes it is seen that people feel bored when they are alone. At such timesIn that time pets can play a vital role. Especially in developed countries, people are always busy with their own lives, so they havetheir own life, they have no time to accompany family and friends. In this situation, pets can be alternatives to friendsthe alternative of friends. For example, a few days ago, I visited GermanyI have visited Germany where I metwhere I have met a man who was alone. He had no friend, but he had five pet cats. He spent his free timeleisure period with the cats and he never felt bored.
Secondly, domestic animals are very loyal to their ownersdomestic animals are so loyal to the master. They can do anything for the master even sacrificing their liveseven sacrifice their life. Last month, I watched an animated movieI have watched an animation movie where a pet dog sacrificed his life for the master. And this event is not rare in real life as well. We have read many times how a loyal pet has saved its master’s life.
Thirdly, some domestic animals have a direct economic impact on societydirect economic impact on society. For example, some people rear some domestic animals and earn money by selling the animals. Besides, sometimes it is seen that domestic animals are the carrier of different diseases. Some animals often carry different types of poisons. But proper vaccination and care, this adverse situation can be overcome.
In the conclusion, it can be said that domestic animals have direct and indirect beneficial impact on the society both in rural and city community.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay maintains a clear pro-pet position and follows an easy-to-track progression through companionship, loyalty, and economic benefit. However, several supporting claims are loosely connected to benefits for the urban community, and frequent grammatical and collocational errors reduce authority. The highest priority is to select two strong community-level benefits, explain their consequences in depth, and support them with precise, credible examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is sustained and supported with several relevant ideas, but development is uneven and some evidence concerns individuals more than the city community.
Focus on two demonstrable community benefits and explain clearly how each one improves urban life.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is logically divided and the numbered sequence is easy to follow, although cohesion is mechanical and some ideas are connected abruptly.
Use topic sentences and cause-and-effect links to connect each example more smoothly to the paragraph's central claim.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for the topic and includes some less common items, but recurring awkward collocations and word choices limit precision.
Replace combinations such as betray with others, alternative of friends, and carrier of diseases with natural, context-appropriate phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are attempted, but frequent errors with agreement, articles, prepositions, tense, and clause structure remain noticeable.
Edit each sentence for one complete clause pattern, paying particular attention to subject-verb agreement and avoiding though-but constructions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say domestic animals, like cats, should not be reared in cities. Others say that such companion animals are beneficial to the community of a city. Which attitude do you believe to be correct?
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