Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
It is often said that the creation of the InternetInternet's creation in the nineteenth made it easier for people to learnmade easier the way in which people could learn, work and study. The use of computers and mobile phones was seen at first as a democratization of knowledge, culture, and books. However, I think that this initial beliefprimary ideology was totally wrong given the side effects and the ways these devices have been usedfollowing the side effects and trajectory and use of these devices. Indeed. I do think that computers and mobile phones for communication have a negative effect on people's reading and writing skills, especially amongfor young people.
First, young people have been raised with mobiles and computers. The problem is that most of the content shared on computers and mobile phones, especially because of social media usebecause of the use of social, consists of videos, images, and emoticonsare videos, images, and emoticons. For example, to learn about the newsget informed of the news, people used to communicate with others, write letters to people who were informed of the situation, or read newspapers before the Internet was created. Today, most—if not all—young peoplemost -if not all young people are being informed by watching videos on the Internet and social mediathe Internet and socials. As a result, this suggests thatwe can attest that young people are getting used to a virtual world made of videos and images.
But not only are newspapers concerned, but also all kinds of information. Indeed, when young people, especially students, needed to find information for a school project they were confronted with what many young people are reluctant to do todaywhat a lot of young people are "reluctant to" today: opening a book, an encyclopedia. Indeed, many young people are becoming less interested in booksare being disinterested in books as computers and mobiles are making online researchon-web research easier and faster. Young people are, as a result, reading less and hoping to quickly find a piece of informationfind quickly a piece of information instead of reading an entire article about it. For example, who reads an entire book about a country to communicate with someone from another country when they can just find a short article about the culture they are trying to know better?
Nevertheless, writing skills are also seriously harmedstrictly damaged by computers and mobiles. Because we are more connected to people thanks to computers and mobiles, we increase the process of talking with everyone, everywhere, the fastest as it can be. Before, thanks to the use of letters, people had time to think about what they would write and how they would like their text to be perfectly spelled and well written. Not only letters but also phone calls would help people develop their writing skills as you could not use abbreviations and slang as people do every day by texting. A single image-a yellow face called a smiley- can replace dozens of words if not more. People are developing slang, imagesimage, videos, and GIF language instead of writing what they feel, think, and want to say in a text.
Also, voicevocal messages become a threat to reading and writing as these two skills are becoming useless in computers and mobile communication. In addition, creating a technology through which users of these devices are enabled to dictate a sentence that the mobile will write in a text makes people even more unskilled in writing and reading.
To conclude, the prominent use of mobiles and computers for communication has numerous negative effects on young people's writing and reading skills. Indeed, it keeps them away from reading and especially writing because of vocal messages and the creation of slang. Communication becomes a way for people to tell what they have to say without thinking about what they are writing and saying.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear position and develops separate, relevant arguments about the effects on reading and writing. Its main limitation is that several points are repetitive or supported by questionable generalisations, while frequent awkward collocations and sentence-level errors reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to select fewer, stronger ideas and explain each with accurate evidence in more controlled language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear agreement position is sustained and supported with relevant ideas about reduced reading and informal digital writing, although some support is repetitive or questionable.
Develop fewer arguments with more credible, specific examples and avoid broad claims about how all young people consume information.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from reading to writing and uses clear paragraphing, but repetition and occasionally awkward transitions weaken cohesion.
Consolidate overlapping points and use referencing and transitions more selectively to create a tighter line of argument.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for the topic, including vocabulary about digital communication, but recurring collocation and word-choice problems reduce precision.
Replace unnatural phrases such as descriptions of damage, online research, and voice messages with standard academic collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the argument clearly, though frequent errors in articles, agreement, punctuation, and clause construction remain noticeable.
Prioritise accurate sentence boundaries and controlled complex sentences, then proofread systematically for articles and subject-verb agreement.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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