A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment?
Sample Response
To meet the demand of increasing population large companies, factories, etc are growing faster than any other past time. New factory means new job opportunity. Again, a new factory means more pollutionpollutions and a new threat to the environment. OnIn the whole, new factories bring good opportunities to a community but the risks they createthe risk it creates by increasing environmental pollutionthe environment pollution is too much. In my opinion, the benefits of having a factory near my community are outweighedout-weighted by the risks. That is why I strongly oppose the establishment of a new factory near my community. It is true that a new factory offers many benefits for local residentspositive things to the people. For example, a new factory creates many employment opportunitieslots of job vacancies as well as many potential employment opportunities. It also creates small business opportunities aroundsurrounded the factory. The factory's managementThe authority of the factory could improve the transportationimproves the transportation and communication systems of the area. It is often observed that a locality having a large factory or industry offers better economic freedom than an ordinary urban area.
However, I believe thatBut I believe, people of my locality are happy with their current economic condition. My community is a beautiful and calm area with negligible pollutionalmost ignorable pollution. My community would be harmed by a large factory. In particular, the factory will destroy the peaceful and clean environmentcalm and neat environment and increaseas well as will increase the air, water and noisesound pollution. In the long run, the environment will be seriously damagedhurt and people's health will be affected. In addition, the new factoryAgain the newly created factory will make the community crowded. To accommodate more workers, more homesworkers more homes will be needed. I don't want to see too many cheaply constructed townhomes in my locality.
I heartily believe this growth will change my community too much. I was born here and most of my memories are connected to the areamost of my memories regarded of the area. I love my community very much. I feel that dangers of the factory are greater than the benefits. So I would strongly oppose the idea of establishing a factory near my community.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay’s strongest feature is its clear opposition to the factory and relevant coverage of employment, local business, infrastructure, pollution, health, crowding, and housing. Its main limitation is language accuracy: frequent word-form, article, agreement, and collocational errors make otherwise understandable points sound imprecise, while the opening paragraph is overloaded. Prioritise separating the introduction from the advantages and rewriting the environmental case with precise cause-and-effect language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response discusses relevant benefits and drawbacks and maintains a clear opposing position, with the environmental and community costs developed more fully.
Explain more directly why the stated employment and infrastructure benefits would not compensate for the long-term local harms.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall movement from benefits to drawbacks and conclusion is clear, but the introduction and advantages are crowded into one paragraph and linking is repetitive.
Use four focused paragraphs: introduction, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion, with one clear topic sentence for each.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient for the topic, but frequent inaccurate phrases such as ‘more pollutions’, ‘ignorable pollution’, and ‘memories regarded of the area’ reduce control.
Use precise expressions such as ‘greater pollution’, ‘negligible pollution’, and ‘most of my memories are connected with this area’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied structures, but frequent article, agreement, comparative, and sentence-construction errors remain evident despite clear meaning.
Review singular countable nouns and parallel verb structures, especially in sentences listing the factory’s environmental effects.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment?
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