Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and see the world. The teaching of a foreign language should be compulsory at all primary schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Sample Response
It is true that by learning other country’s language, we could learn various types of new traditions and cultures. Therefore it is believed that the study of foreign language should become a compulsory course at all elementary schools. I personally agree with the statement as it would become a valuable asset for the children, and the following essay will discuss it in details.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix determiner form Original: other Suggested revision: another Why it matters: Use “another” with the singular countable noun “country.”
- 2. Use natural phrasing Original: learn various types of new traditions and cultures Suggested revision: learn about a variety of traditions and cultures Why it matters: People learn about traditions and cultures rather than learn them as types.
- 3. State the link clearly Original: Therefore it is believed Suggested revision: Therefore, I believe Why it matters: This wording connects the reason to the writer’s own stated view more clearly.
- 4. Use plural noun Original: language Suggested revision: languages Why it matters: The general category requires the plural form “languages.”
- 5. Choose precise noun Original: course Suggested revision: subject Why it matters: A school curriculum area is more naturally described as a subject.
- 6. Fix verb construction Original: as it would become Suggested revision: because it would be Why it matters: The language itself would be an asset, so “be” expresses the intended relationship correctly.
- 7. Fix fixed expression Original: details Suggested revision: detail Why it matters: The standard expression is “in detail,” with the singular noun.
Suggested Rewrites
- other another
- learn various types of new traditions and cultures learn about a variety of traditions and cultures
- Therefore it is believed Therefore, I believe
- language languages
- course subject
- as it would become because it would be
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response states a clear position and uses generally understandable language, but it is only an introduction and is far below the required length, so no argument is developed or supported. The highest priority is to add two or three logically organised body paragraphs that explain distinct reasons for the position with specific examples, followed by a concise conclusion.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear agreement position is stated, but the response stops before presenting or developing any reasons.
Develop the position with at least two relevant reasons, detailed explanations, and specific supporting examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The three sentences follow a basic introductory sequence, but the response is too incomplete to establish sustained progression or paragraphing.
Organise a complete essay into a clear introduction, focused body paragraphs, and a conclusion with purposeful linking.
Lexical Resource
Some relevant vocabulary is used, but the short response shows limited range and several awkward combinations.
Use more precise topic vocabulary and correct collocations such as foreign-language study and discuss in detail.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear through a mix of sentence forms, although article, possessive, and singular-plural errors are noticeable.
Improve control of articles, possessives, and countable nouns while sustaining accurate complex sentences across a full essay.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and see the world. The teaching of a foreign language should be compulsory at all primary schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
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