Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and see the world. The teaching of a foreign language should be compulsory at all primary schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Sample Response
I believe learning a foreign languagelearning of a foreign language for all students should be compulsory at all primary schools. I would like to highlight the advantages it would bringadvantages it will have and the potential benefits it will offer if teaching were made mandatoryif the teaching is made mandatory.
In primary school, studentsIn primary school students actually get the chance to learn new and varied subjectsnew and variety of subjects. Primary school is the best place for a student to learn any new skill or language because their mindsmind can be moulded easily at that time. AThis new language will eventually become their second languagesecond natural language as naturally aslike other natural activities like brushing their teeth or riding a bicycle.
I believe
Why this response received Band 4.5
The response states a clear position and offers one relevant reason: primary-age children may acquire a language more readily. However, at only 105 words it is severely under length, ends with an unfinished fragment, and does not develop the cultural-insight aspect, multiple benefits, possible limitations, or a conclusion. The essential next step is to complete a full essay with several explained reasons and examples before refining its wording and grammar.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear opinion and one relevant advantage are present, but the response is severely under length, minimally developed, and unfinished, leaving major aspects of the compulsory-language argument unaddressed.
Write at least 250 words with two fully explained reasons, including how language learning builds cultural understanding, and finish with a clear conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The opening position leads into one supporting paragraph, but progression stops abruptly at "I believe," and there is too little developed material to form a complete, coherent essay.
Plan a complete introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion, using each body paragraph to develop one main reason from claim through explanation to example.
Lexical Resource
The limited response uses some appropriate educational vocabulary, but repetition of "language," "primary school," and "natural" and awkward combinations show restricted flexibility.
Expand the topic-specific range with precise terms such as "early language acquisition," "cultural awareness," and "compulsory curriculum," while avoiding repeated wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some accurate simple and complex sentences are produced, but the short sample shows limited range and includes agreement, article, phrasing, and fragment errors.
Complete every sentence and check noun phrases and agreement, for example "a variety of subjects" and "children's minds can be shaped more easily."
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and see the world. The teaching of a foreign language should be compulsory at all primary schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
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