Nowadays, news companies spend a lot of money covering international news. However, local news is more relevant to people’s lives and should receive more funding. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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In today’s moderngrowing world, news providers such as television channels, online news outletshandles and newspapers are investing a lot of money inon international news coverage while neglectingInternational news coverage neglecting local news. I believe local news is essential to society as it can inform people about events in their areahappenings around them.
On the one hand, local news should receive more funding as it is crucial forto the people living in the region. To illustrate, people should be aware of the weather forecast forof their country or region before setting out for work so that they can anticipateso as to make them anticipate any adverse conditionsany bad condition and take necessary precautions or prepare for it. Furthermore, the public also needs to know the latest information about eventslatest news of happenings like crime, traffic and natural disasters around them. This can prompt them to change their routemake them change their route when going out to prevent undesirable events. For instance, if a particular street has repeatedly been reported for crimehas been reported over time for their crime, people will tend to avoid that street when commuting.
On the other hand, investing a lot of money in international news reportsInternational reports has its advantages. Global businessmen rely on international news from the mediaInternational news from media to keep them abreast of eventsabreast with happenings around the world. For instance, a sudden change in the price of oilsudden change in oil price in a country will mean more money for some businessmen. In addition, in case of a new outbreak of a diseasenew breakout of diseases, other countries will be on the lookout for the signssign and symptoms of the new diseases and take necessary precautions at the airport to curb the disease. Through International news, ways to prevent or curb the diseases will be learnt by the people, so as to protect themselves. In the case of the COVID-19 pandemic, people got to know about the disease early due to international news coverage of local news agenciessome local news agency.
In conclusion, investing a lot of money in international news coverage is vital. However, I agree that local news should get more attention owing to the fact that residents depend on the information for their everyday liveslife.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response maintains a clear preference for greater local-news funding and develops both local and international benefits with relevant everyday examples. Its main limitation is that several supporting points are imprecisely expressed or only loosely explained, which weakens the force of the argument. The highest priority is to develop fewer examples more precisely, showing exactly how each one proves that local coverage deserves relatively greater investment.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained, and both local and international news are discussed through generally relevant explanations and examples.
Make the comparison more explicit by showing why local needs justify greater funding despite the acknowledged value of international coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically through a clear introduction, two focused body paragraphs, and a consistent conclusion.
Use less formulaic contrast framing and strengthen the logical links between each example and the paragraph's central claim.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the topic, with effective items such as 'keep them abreast' and 'necessary precautions', despite recurring collocational imprecision.
Improve natural word combinations, particularly phrases such as 'investing money in', 'disease outbreak', and 'news about local events'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, although agreement, articles, prepositions, and singular-plural forms are not consistently controlled.
Proofread systematically for agreement and noun-form accuracy, especially in phrases such as 'signs and symptoms' and references to streets or agencies.