The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.
Sample Response
The new century comes with a different technology, inventions, political and social changes and also brings the new brutality in human history and the 21st century has already brought many changes in the world and human lives and certainly there are yet more changes to come. First of all, the technological changes and updates would become more frequent and the use of the internet, cell phone and computers would become widespread. Even in very remote areas people would use these technological advances and that would both positively and negatively affect their lifestyle. Second, the religious fanaticism would diminish and except few fanatic people, most other would live a life where religion would bring little conflicts. Third, the improvements in genetic engineering and medical science would improve the way of people live as it would eradicate many deadly diseases. However, the history suggests that new devastating diseases would emerge without any cure. Fourth, the conflict among nations would become more economic than the doctrine and politics. The world would be divided in terms of capitalism and socialism and new political dogma would appear in many countries.
Fifth, People would learn more about the outer space as the experiment and scientific research on outer space are going on more steadily than ever. Sixth, the nuclear power would replace the traditional power sources and at the same time many countries would possess the nuclear power and that would always be a threat to the world. I would not be surprised if nuclear war takes place in this century and destroy a great number of countries. Then people would explore the sea resources as the land resources would be less in number and that would be a great new source for people.
In conclusion, the world would have newer technologies and a better life expectation in this century while the political conflict would arise and that might lead to destruction. At the same time, people would learn more about the outer space and sea resources more than ever.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct expression Original: the technological changes and updates Suggested revision: technological changes and updates Why it matters: The general plural noun phrase takes no article.
- 2. Correct expression Original: the internet, cell phone and computers Suggested revision: the internet, mobile phones, and computers Why it matters: The countable device must be plural and parallel with computers.
- 3. Correct expression Original: lifestyle Suggested revision: lifestyles Why it matters: The plural people have individual lifestyles.
- 4. Correct expression Original: the religious fanaticism Suggested revision: religious fanaticism Why it matters: The abstract concept takes no article in this general statement.
- 5. Correct expression Original: except few fanatic people Suggested revision: except for a few fanatics Why it matters: Except takes for, and the countable plural requires a few.
- 6. Correct expression Original: other Suggested revision: others Why it matters: Others is the pronoun required without a following noun.
- 7. Correct expression Original: little Suggested revision: few Why it matters: Conflicts is countable, so few is required.
- 8. Correct expression Original: improvements in genetic engineering and medical science would improve Suggested revision: advances in genetic engineering and medical science would transform Why it matters: The revised wording avoids repetition and states the effect more naturally.
- 9. Correct expression Original: the way of people live Suggested revision: the way people live Why it matters: The way is followed directly by a clause without of.
- 10. Correct expression Original: the history suggests Suggested revision: history suggests Why it matters: History takes no article when referring generally to past experience.
- 11. Correct expression Original: without any cure Suggested revision: for which no cure exists Why it matters: The relative clause clearly links the lack of a cure to the diseases.
- 12. Correct expression Original: the conflict among nations Suggested revision: conflicts among nations Why it matters: The general prediction concerns multiple conflicts.
Suggested Rewrites
- the technological changes and updates technological changes and updates
- the internet, cell phone and computers the internet, mobile phones, and computers
- lifestyle lifestyles
- the religious fanaticism religious fanaticism
- except few fanatic people except for a few fanatics
- other others
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response offers a wide and relevant set of predictions across technology, medicine, politics, energy, space, and natural resources, and its conclusion captures the mixed outlook. The main limitation is that the essay reads as a numbered list of brief assertions rather than a developed argument; the priority is to choose fewer major changes and explain each through a concrete example, mechanism, or consequence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The task is addressed with many relevant predictions, but most are only briefly stated and lack the requested examples or detailed support.
Develop three or four predictions fully by explaining why each change is likely and illustrating its probable effects.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from one prediction to another and uses clear paragraphs, though ordinal sequencing is mechanical and topic grouping is limited.
Group related predictions into thematic paragraphs and use logical relationships instead of relying mainly on numbered transitions.
Lexical Resource
The essay displays a fairly wide range of vocabulary for scientific, political, and social change, with several awkward or inaccurate combinations.
Use more natural collocations, such as life expectancy, ideological conflict, and exploration of outer space.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates meaning clearly, but agreement, article, conditional, and clause-structure errors recur.
Check subject-verb agreement and hypothetical future forms, especially in longer sentences containing several coordinated clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.
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