The overuse of natural resources causes an ultimate exhaust of them. People have been using them to be in the swim of new styles such as making new furniture of recent design. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Therefore, the government should discourage people the overuse of these resources. To what extent do you support or oppose the idea?
Sample Response
In our life, we use the natural resources in many different ways and in fact natural resources are vital for our existences. Our lives will simply become impossible if we stop using natural resources. But it is a matter of pity that the way we overuse those resources. The existing natural resources are limited and the demand and consumption are increasing day by day as the world population is increasing. As a result, natural resources are rather being reduced with the increased and imprudent uses. We must control the overuse of these priceless resources for our own survival
The population and their demand are increasing and with technological improvements the natural resources are being used more than any other time in the human history. We use those to meet our daily and vital needs. For instance, we use natural gas to cook food. But the natural resources like fuels and gas are also used to fulfil our luxury. In fact, the mass people will try to use natural resources to adopt new fashions and changing demands. People changes their furniture models, car models so frequently and it has become a symbol of their prominence. Thus they use natural resources like wood and fuel so unwisely and in my opinion, this is quite unnecessary.
The government of a country sworn to look after the betterment of the countrymen. People are unaware of the aftereffects of this overuse. So the government has to play a vital role by sending the message to the mass population and by taking necessary initiatives to prevent this overuse of the natural resources. However, we all should understand the issue and should take part to prevent the overuse of our natural resources. The government can not stop such a bad trend all alone. Making new furniture is a right to a citizen and Government can not stop this by enforcing laws only. The citizen must be conscious about the devastating aftereffects.
In conclusion, I personally believe that the Government should be strict and discourage the mass people overusing natural resources. In addition, a comprehensive effort by all is needed to make the steps taken by the Government successful.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use plural life reference Original: life Suggested revision: lives Why it matters: The plural possessive “our” naturally refers to multiple individual lives.
- 2. Remove unnecessary article Original: the natural resources in many Suggested revision: natural resources in many Why it matters: Plural “natural resources” is used generally here and does not take “the.”
- 3. Use uncountable singular noun Original: existences Suggested revision: existence Why it matters: “Existence” is normally singular and uncountable in this general sense.
- 4. Use formal trend adverb Original: day by day Suggested revision: steadily Why it matters: “Steadily” expresses the continuing increase more concisely and formally.
- 5. Use natural population phrase Original: as the world population is increasing Suggested revision: as the world's population increases Why it matters: The possessive form and simple present are more natural for a general trend.
- 6. Add missing full stop Original: our own survival Suggested revision: our own survival. Why it matters: A full stop is needed before the next paragraph.
- 7. Fix possessive agreement Original: their Suggested revision: its Why it matters: The collective singular noun “population” takes the possessive “its.”
- 8. Use standard technology phrase Original: improvements Suggested revision: advances Why it matters: “Technological advances” is the standard collocation for progress in technology.
- 9. Add comparison preposition Original: more than any other time Suggested revision: more than at any other time Why it matters: The time comparison requires the preposition “at.”
- 10. Remove unnecessary article Original: in the human history Suggested revision: in human history Why it matters: The fixed general phrase is “in human history” without “the.”
- 11. Use object pronoun Original: those Suggested revision: them Why it matters: Use the object pronoun “them” to refer back to natural resources.
- 12. Fix example wording Original: natural resources like fuels and gas Suggested revision: natural resources such as fuel and gas Why it matters: Use “such as” for examples and the uncountable noun “fuel” in this general reference.
Suggested Rewrites
- life lives
- the natural resources in many natural resources in many
- existences existence
- day by day steadily
- as the world population is increasing as the world's population increases
- our own survival our own survival.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay gives a clear supportive position and relevant discussion of finite resources, population growth, luxury consumption, government responsibility, and individual awareness. Its main limitation is that the proposed government response remains vague and the argument repeats overuse rather than explaining specific environmental consequences or policies; the highest-priority improvement is to develop concrete measures such as taxation, recycling standards, public education, or sustainable-product incentives.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is consistent and the causes of unnecessary consumption are relevant, but policy solutions and environmental impacts are only generally developed.
Explain two specific government measures and show how each would reduce furniture, fuel, or other resource consumption without preventing essential use.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure provides broad progression from the problem to consumption and responsibility, but repetition and loose links reduce focus.
Use one paragraph for why overuse occurs and another for clearly sequenced government and citizen solutions, avoiding repeated statements that resources are limited.
Lexical Resource
The response has adequate topic vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate expressions such as "vital for our existences," "fulfil our luxury," and "mass people" weaken precision.
Use natural phrases such as "essential to human life," "satisfy non-essential wants," "the general public," and "resource depletion."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains broadly clear, but recurring agreement, article, clause, and verb-pattern errors affect fluency throughout.
Correct forms such as "people change their furniture," "the government is responsible," and "discourage people from overusing natural resources."
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The overuse of natural resources causes an ultimate exhaust of them. People have been using them to be in the swim of new styles such as making new furniture of recent design. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Therefore, the government should discourage people the overuse of these resources. To what extent do you support or oppose the idea?
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