Children should never be educated at home by their parents. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
Sample Response
Nobody can say with full confidencewith a full confidence whether children should be taught at home or at institutions for childrenany children's institutions. There are many different children and everyone demand of education suitable only for him. But for most childrenmost of the children, the best way of learning aboutthe life is attending institutions for childrenbeing in the children's institutions. Few would disputeNobody would argue that contactcontacts between children of the same age are very important for children's developmentbringing your child up. Such a contact is very important for playing, socialisingentertaining and learning to live with other people. Living harmoniouslyThe harmonious living with other people, to my mind, is the first task for any man. Lack of this harmony causes problemssets problems and troubles. The children need space to run and make noise, to jump and cry. Do you or your neighbours allow these actions for your child? If you live in town, it is difficult to find a safe place to play. Kindergartens provide such an opportunitygive such a possibility. They give space, a lot of toys and equipment for physical exerciseconstructions for physical exercises. So, if you have bad living conditions, the kindergarten is the best option for your childthe best way for you. But if you have a large family with many children and enough space, you may keep your child at home. You should be sure that the child feels, dressed and comfortable. His brothers and sisters give him necessary social contactnecessary contacts. It has long been observedIt's noticed long ago that children in big families are much more easy-goingtempered and calm. They live in a more harmonious environmentare located in the more harmonic world than others. Sometimes differences in age cause difficulties in relationships between childrenput troubles in contacts between children in large families. Then it is better for the children to be sent to the kindergarten (school). But if quarrels don't last for a long time, everything is all right. In general, quarrels develop an ability to cooperate with people. They develop a personal initiative and force setting the balance. In such a way the child gets lessons of life. Oddly, the quarrels often take place in kindergartens and schools and we shouldn't fear it. Side by side with quarrels parents often are afraid of colds which happen in kindergartens more frequently. Parents prefer keeping the child at home. But for a healthy child odd cold (if illness occurs, it goes its normal course) can't make big harm to the child. And if the child is adaptable to the conditions of public places earlier it would be better for him in future. In general, I am a follower of the theory of keeping children in adapted places such as good kindergartens. But keeping children in such a place can't replace family and home. Only together they make the harmonic and beautiful union.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response explores several relevant considerations, especially social contact, space, siblings, and exposure to illness, and ultimately favours combining institutional education with family life. Its main limitation is a long, unstructured and sometimes tangential discussion whose position on the absolute claim remains imprecise, compounded by frequent unnatural language. Prioritise a direct thesis, balanced advantage-disadvantage paragraphs, and clearer sentences built around the actual home-education decision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Relevant advantages and disadvantages are discussed, but the focus shifts between home education, kindergarten, living conditions, quarrels, and colds without fully resolving the stated claim.
State a direct degree of agreement and organise the response around the strongest educational and social advantages and disadvantages of homeschooling.
Coherence and Cohesion
Individual ideas can be followed, but the single paragraph, repeated pivots, and loosely connected examples create uneven progression.
Use an introduction, one paragraph for home education, one for institutional education, and a concise conclusion that resolves the comparison.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to express the main ideas, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word forms make the discussion sound strained.
Replace phrases such as children's institutions, sets problems, put troubles, and odd cold with schools, causes problems, creates difficulties, and occasional cold.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are attempted, but agreement, articles, clause structure, and comparative forms are frequently inaccurate.
Build shorter complete sentences and check subject-verb agreement, especially in everyone demands and children are more easy-going.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Children should never be educated at home by their parents. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
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