Children should never be educated at home by their parents. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
Sample Response
Nobody can say with confidence that children should be taught at home or in any educational institutionat any children's institutions. There are many different children and every one demand of education suitable only for him.
But for most childrenfor most of children the best way of learning aboutthe life is attending educational institutionsbeing in the children's institutions. Nobody would argue that contactcontacts between children of the same age are very important for children's developmentbringing your child up. Such a contact is very important for playing, entertaining and learning living with other people. Living harmoniouslyThe harmonious living with other people, to my mind, is the primary goal for everyonefirst task for any man. Lack of this harmony causes problems and difficultiessets problems and troubles.
The children need space to run and make noise, to jump and cry. Do you or your neighbours allow these actions for your child? If you live in town, it is difficult to find a safe place to play. Kindergartens provide this opportunitygive such a possibility. They give space, a lot of toys and equipment for physical exerciseconstructions for physical exercises. So, if you have limited living spacebad living conditions, the kindergarten is the best way for you. But if you have a large family with many children and enough space, you may keep your child at home. You should be sure that the child feels, dressed and comfortable. His brothers and sisters provide him with necessary social contactgive him necessary contacts. It has long been observedIt's noticed long ago that children in big families are much more eveneasy-tempered and calm. They are living in a more harmonious environmentlocated in more harmonic world than others.
Sometimes differences in age put troubles in contacts between children in large families. Then it is better for a child to be sentfor child to be sent to the kindergarten (school). But if quarrels don't last for a long time, everything is all right. In general, quarrels develop the abilityquarrels develop ability to cooperate with people. They develop a personal initiative and encourage them to find a balanceforce setting the balance. In such a way the child gets lessons of life. Addly, the quarrels often take place in kindergartens and schools and we shouldn't fear it.
Side by side with quarrels parents often are afraid of colds which happen in kindergartens more frequently. Parents prefer keeping the child at home. But for a healthy child odd cold (if illness occurs, it goes its normal course) can't make big harm to the child. And if the child is adaptable to the conditions of public places earlier it would be better for him in future.
In general, I am a follower of the theory of keeping children in adapted places such as good kindergartens. But keeping children in such a place can't replace family and home. Only together they make harmonic and beautiful union.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response offers a sustained discussion with several relevant observations about social contact, play space, sibling relationships, and illness. Its main limitation is that it largely treats the issue as a choice between home and kindergarten, so it only partially addresses parental home education and its position remains imprecise. The highest-priority improvement is to frame a direct answer to the stated proposition and develop balanced, education-focused advantages and disadvantages.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response discusses several benefits and drawbacks and reaches a preference, but it largely substitutes kindergarten attendance for the broader issue of parental home education.
State a direct position on home education and develop advantages and disadvantages that focus on learning as well as childcare and socialisation.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and the broad movement from social contact to practical conditions and health are discernible, although progression is sometimes loose and repetitive.
Give each paragraph one clearly stated education-related claim and connect its supporting details directly to that claim.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough vocabulary to discuss family, social, and practical issues, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision.
Replace awkward combinations such as references to children being located in a harmonic world with natural, context-appropriate collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and more complex sentences communicates the main message, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, word forms, and sentence construction remain noticeable.
Prioritise accurate article use and subject-verb agreement, then check that every complex sentence has a complete and natural clause structure.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Children should never be educated at home by their parents. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
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