Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
Sample Response
In today's world competition among countries for hosting any international sporting event has increased. Many people believe that international sporting events cause many issues. However, I strongly disagree because it gives an opportunity to all nations to come together. Firstly, organising any sporting event requires costly equipment, proper planning, manpower, arrangement, money and preparation. For instance, for arranging one cricket match panning, a stadium, schedule and other preparation are required. People also purchase costly tickets for watching the match. People who travel around the world for watching those matches require accommodation arrangement. This may cause unwanted expenses for countries who can host sporting events. However, we cannot deny the importance of sports in our life. Any international sporting event like Olympic Games gives an opportunity to all participants to perform their best and make records. Sports lovers around the world definitely would get the best entertainment because of such events. Nowadays films, television serials are entertaining and popular among people. Likewise, sports are also equally important, entertaining and popular. From this, it becomes quite evident that such kind of events encourages young people in sports activities. Furthermore, it gives an opportunity to all nations around the world to come together. For instance, in football world cup most of the countries can participate, which is very good for maintaining peace as well as maintaining good international relationship globally. This helps them to come closer to each other. This shows why sporting events have vast importance. In conclusion, although arranging a sports event is expensive and causes some issues, it has a vast importance at the global level. For any sportsperson, it gives a chance not only to perform but also to entertain. Thus disadvantages of sporting events outweigh the advantages, and I believe that there are too many benefits because of such events.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Punctuate opening phrase Original: In today's world competition Suggested revision: In today's world, competition Why it matters: The introductory prepositional phrase requires a following comma.
- 2. Use infinitive purpose Original: for hosting any international sporting event Suggested revision: to host international sporting events Why it matters: The infinitive expresses what countries compete to do, and the general reference should be plural.
- 3. Clarify plural reference Original: because it gives an opportunity Suggested revision: because such events give an opportunity Why it matters: The singular pronoun has no clear antecedent, while the argument concerns sporting events generally.
- 4. Use indefinite article Original: organising any sporting event Suggested revision: organising a sporting event Why it matters: A general singular example requires “a”, not “any”.
- 5. Fix purpose and spelling Original: for arranging one cricket match panning Suggested revision: to arrange one cricket match, planning Why it matters: The purpose requires an infinitive, “planning” is misspelled, and the following list needs a comma.
- 6. Make requirement list parallel Original: a stadium, schedule and other preparation Suggested revision: a stadium, a schedule, and other preparations Why it matters: The count nouns need parallel articles or plural forms and consistent list punctuation.
- 7. Fix ticket purpose Original: tickets for watching the match Suggested revision: tickets to watch the match Why it matters: An infinitive naturally expresses the purpose of buying tickets.
- 8. Fix travel purpose Original: travel around the world for watching Suggested revision: travel around the world to watch Why it matters: The infinitive is required to express the purpose of travelling.
- 9. Use plural arrangements Original: require accommodation arrangement Suggested revision: require accommodation arrangements Why it matters: The general arrangements needed by multiple travellers should be plural.
- 10. Use cost adjective Original: unwanted expenses Suggested revision: unnecessary expenses Why it matters: “Unnecessary” expresses avoidable expenditure more precisely than “unwanted”.
- 11. Use nonhuman relative Original: countries who can host Suggested revision: countries that host Why it matters: Use “that” for countries, and the modal is unnecessary for actual hosts.
- 12. Use plural lives Original: sports in our life Suggested revision: sports in our lives Why it matters: The plural possessive “our” refers to the lives of multiple people.
Suggested Rewrites
- In today's world competition In today's world, competition
- for hosting any international sporting event to host international sporting events
- because it gives an opportunity because such events give an opportunity
- organising any sporting event organising a sporting event
- for arranging one cricket match panning to arrange one cricket match, planning
- a stadium, schedule and other preparation a stadium, a schedule, and other preparations
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response discusses costs as a drawback and develops several benefits, particularly entertainment, youth participation, and international cooperation. However, the conclusion directly contradicts the earlier position by saying that disadvantages outweigh advantages before again claiming there are many benefits, leaving the final opinion unclear; the one-paragraph presentation also weakens organisation. Prioritise stating one consistent judgement and structuring separate paragraphs for hosting costs and the strongest national benefits.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Response
Both views receive relevant discussion, but development is uneven and the contradictory final judgement prevents a clear, consistent opinion.
Decide whether benefits or problems are greater and express that same position unambiguously in both the introduction and conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a basic progression from costs to benefits and conclusion, but the single paragraph, repetition, and final contradiction disrupt overall coherence.
Create separate introduction, drawback, benefit, and conclusion paragraphs, with each paragraph advancing one clear stage of the argument.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for sporting events and international relations, but repetition and frequent inaccurate or unnatural combinations reduce precision.
Use precise phrases such as hosting costs, infrastructure investment, accommodation demand, inspire youth participation, and strengthen international relations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of structures is attempted, but recurring errors in articles, agreement, relative clauses, infinitives, and sentence construction reduce control.
Check subject-verb agreement and article use, particularly in sentences about events, countries, participants, and international relationships.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
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