The age of Information Technology has taken a lot of people by surprise. While it has become a way of life for some, others know very little about it and maybe unlikely to learn. Eventually, as a result of this division, we will have a polarized society and this will lead to serious social problems. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Sample Response
In today's worldtoday's contemporary world, technology has changed many aspects of our lifestyle and thus many tasks have been computerisedevery work has been computerised. Some people believeA group of people believes that not everyone can learneveryone cannot learn how to use these devices and this eventually divides societydivides the society into two distinct groupstwo different sides. However, I disagreeI personally disagree with them for several main reasonsbecause of some main reasons, which are elucidated below. It is true that the pace of technological changethe speed of technology has increasedwas on the increase over the last two decadesin two last decades, but it is also spreading rapidlyit prevails rapidly too. For example, my grandmother who has 80 years old, and she is uneducated and can use a cell phone as much as she needs, such as sending a message or dialling every mobile number. I mean, today, technology is not just for the youngeryoung generation or people with a high level of educationpeople with high level of education. Furthermore, nowadays, technology is presentwe are witnesses of technology even in remote cities and villages. All of them have an access to two most important devices, the internet and the computer because everyone can buy these tools in reasonable price or even by monthly instalments. In addition, today children are taught in primary school howtaught in primary school to know how to use computers. As a result, if they cannot afford to purchase these gadgets, they will learn in school. HoweverWhile, there are many individuals who prefer to live in traditional ways. However, these differences cannot create a divided societycreate divided society, because they choose this way of life for themselvesthis way for living themselves. All in all, from what has been discussed I pen down saying that technology is spreading all around the world and everyone can use it easily.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear disagreement and offers several relevant reasons, including older people's practical technology use, wider access, and school instruction. Its main weakness is that these points rely on broad assertions and do not adequately examine the predicted social polarisation and serious problems; the single-paragraph presentation and frequent language errors also reduce clarity. The priority is to develop a direct explanation of why the digital divide would or would not produce social harm.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported with relevant examples, but the response only briefly addresses the proposed social division and its consequences.
Explain directly how access, affordability, and education prevent polarisation, then evaluate at least one possible social problem before rejecting the claim.
Coherence and Cohesion
The progression from accessibility to education and personal choice is broadly understandable, but one unbroken paragraph and mechanical or inaccurate connectors weaken cohesion.
Organise the reasons into separate body paragraphs and use complete transitions instead of fragmentary combinations such as 'While' followed by 'However'.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers the topic adequately, but frequent unnatural combinations such as 'every work', 'prevails rapidly', and 'in reasonable price' reduce precision.
Use established expressions such as 'most work has been computerised', 'technology is spreading rapidly', and 'at an affordable price'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex sentences, but frequent errors in clause structure, articles, prepositions, agreement, and relative clauses sometimes strain readability.
Build shorter complete sentences first, then check article and preposition choices before combining ideas into complex structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The age of Information Technology has taken a lot of people by surprise. While it has become a way of life for some, others know very little about it and maybe unlikely to learn. Eventually, as a result of this division, we will have a polarized society and this will lead to serious social problems. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
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