International marketing is sometimes seen as invasive and an intrusion into the country in question. Others argue that it is a necessary and economical form of education in addition to spreading ideas, language and culture. Which point of view do you agree with?
Sample Response
In the current world, international marketing is certainly believed as an introducing an illegal aspect into the economy of the host country. However, it is often considered by some that such type of marketing is significant for the economic form of knowledge as well as exchanging diverse culture, languages and customs. In my opinion, I strongly believe that international marketing promotes globalisation by opening new opportunities in future business and thus improve economic growth.
International marketing has several advantages. Firstly, enhancing economic growth of the country would often be promoted by global marketing. In other words, it certainly opens new doors for future business. For instance, recent studies show that there should certainly a considerable growth in the field of international trade in electronic gadgets from countries such as Russia and China. In addition, International marketing often explores inner talent of citizens across the globe.
Moreover, improving the brand reputation of the product would certainly have another plus point of the international business because product brands often gain reputation and popularity across the world. Multinational banks often attained reputation in the current scenario. Hence, local brands of the country would probably become familiar across the world by international marketing.
Furthermore, spreading of ideas, customs, tradition and language would often possible by global trade, thus spreading diverse culture throughout the world. World food products in popular supermarkets such as Tesco and Asda would often show an example of global business networks, therefore, introducing global food into the country’s local trade market.
In conclusion, international marketing should be promoted through the world for improving economic knowledge as well promoting different culture worldwide. Such promotion of international marketing should often possible without interrupting nation own local culture and trade by making awareness among citizen about its advantages.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use natural time phrase Original: In the current world Suggested revision: In today's world Why it matters: This is the standard expression for referring to contemporary society.
- 2. Use viewed as Original: is certainly believed as Suggested revision: is often viewed as Why it matters: Viewed as is the correct passive construction for describing a perception.
- 3. Fix the noun phrase Original: an introducing an illegal aspect Suggested revision: an illegal intrusion Why it matters: The original phrase has two articles and no grammatical head noun.
- 4. Use this type Original: such Suggested revision: this Why it matters: Such requires a construction such as such a type, whereas this type is direct and grammatical.
- 5. Use intended concept Original: the economic form of knowledge Suggested revision: an economical form of education Why it matters: Economical describes cost-effectiveness, while economic refers to the economy.
- 6. Fix parallel structure Original: as well as exchanging diverse culture, languages and customs Suggested revision: as well as facilitating the exchange of diverse cultures, languages and customs Why it matters: The phrase needs an -ing form parallel to the preceding description and a plural count noun.
- 7. Remove repeated stance Original: In my opinion, I strongly believe Suggested revision: I strongly believe Why it matters: In my opinion and I believe express the same stance.
- 8. Use natural noun phrase Original: new opportunities in future business Suggested revision: new business opportunities Why it matters: This concise phrase expresses opportunities for future business development.
- 9. Use participle after thus Original: improve Suggested revision: improving Why it matters: Improving correctly links the result to the preceding clause.
- 10. Name economic growth directly Original: enhancing economic growth of the country Suggested revision: economic growth Why it matters: The original gerund phrase cannot serve as the entity being promoted.
- 11. Use clear modal Original: would often be promoted by Suggested revision: can be promoted by Why it matters: Can clearly expresses the claimed general possibility.
- 12. Add the main verb Original: there should certainly a considerable growth Suggested revision: there will certainly be considerable growth Why it matters: The existential construction requires be after the modal.
Suggested Rewrites
- In the current world In today's world
- is certainly believed as is often viewed as
- an introducing an illegal aspect an illegal intrusion
- such this
- the economic form of knowledge an economical form of education
- as well as exchanging diverse culture, languages and customs as well as facilitating the exchange of diverse cultures, languages and customs
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear position in favour of international marketing and organises relevant benefits around economic growth, brand recognition, and cultural exchange. Its main limitation is that these claims and examples are often vague, while repetitive wording and frequent grammatical errors weaken precision; the priority is to explain fewer benefits more convincingly with specific evidence and more controlled sentence construction.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is sustained and several relevant benefits are presented, though their explanation and examples are sometimes vague or insufficiently convincing.
Develop two strongest arguments with a precise cause-and-effect explanation and a credible, fully explained example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay progresses logically through distinct benefit paragraphs, but formulaic transitions and repeated sentence patterns make cohesion conspicuous.
Create smoother progression by linking each paragraph's claim to the previous point and reducing repetitive introductory adverbs.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate topic vocabulary for economics, trade, and culture, but repetition and inaccurate collocations limit flexibility and precision.
Replace repeated terms such as often and certainly with precise phrasing, and check collocations related to growth, reputation, and cultural influence.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex forms are attempted, but frequent missing verbs, agreement errors, and malformed clauses reduce grammatical accuracy throughout.
Practise constructing complete clauses with the correct auxiliary and verb form, then proofread every subject-verb combination.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
International marketing is sometimes seen as invasive and an intrusion into the country in question. Others argue that it is a necessary and economical form of education in addition to spreading ideas, language and culture. Which point of view do you agree with?
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