Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?
Sample Response
In today’s digitalmodernized era, nobodyera nobody has sufficient time to write letters to their loved ones. Moreover, itMoreover it also takes longer to send or receive informationany information. But the Internet is an easy waythe easiest way to send messages to our loved ones. Communication can be either in the form of e-mail or through text messages sent via internet to mobile phones. We can send and receive messages straight awayway.
To conclude, I would like to say that the Internet is one of the most modernized and most successful tools, not only for communication, even to get most relevant information regarding every field in a very short period of time.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response communicates a relevant basic idea and gives a clear general view that online communication is fast and convenient. However, at only 107 words, it is severely underlength and provides almost no developed argument, evidence, or sustained discussion of how the Internet brings people together. The highest-priority improvement is to build a full essay with a clear position, two developed reasons, and specific supporting examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a relevant viewpoint but addresses the task only minimally and leaves its single main idea almost entirely undeveloped.
Write at least 250 words and develop two distinct reasons showing how Internet communication connects people, supported by specific examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The short response has a basic sequence and uses simple linking words, but it lacks developed body paragraphs and sustained progression.
Organise the essay into an introduction, two logically developed body paragraphs, and a concise conclusion with clear referencing between ideas.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for the basic message but is repetitive and includes several awkward or inaccurate expressions.
Use more precise terms for communication and replace phrases such as modernized era and straight way with natural academic wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple meanings are generally clear, but punctuation, article use, and complex linking constructions contain noticeable errors.
Practise punctuating introductory connectors and constructing paired forms such as not only ... but also accurately.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?
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