The mass media, including television, radio and newspapers, have great influence in shaping people's ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
“People react according to the perspective they hold in any situation”situation" is a well-known and accepted fact around the world. Of course, perspective is highly influenced by the information people receive through communication channels like TV, radio and newspapers. Hence, as expected, to control the development of people's viewsburgeoning of people's thoughts, many countries have restricted media freedomregulated the freedom of media.
Firstly,Firstly, nowadays, media plays a vital role in forming our perspectives ontowards our country's current political affairscountry's current politics, sports and other issues as it is an important part of our everyday life. Almost all of us use some sort of media to stay informed aboutget updated about the world. In fact, forIn fact for many of us, a day starts with a newspaper. Since media professionalspersons are highly revered, we therefore trustaccordingly, we truly trust the information we receive from media. For example,For example: during the World War IIworld war II, Hitler used the German media to spread false news about atrocities againstover German people living in other European countries to prepare people in Germany for warto mentally prepare everyone in Germany to gear up for war.
Secondly, media also shapes how we understandshapes our minds to understand each other's cultural values and perspectives. Media brings us views of different people over the same issues and based on the circumstances we react, oppose and even embrace these different views. Also, media brings all of us together on a single platformbrings all of us at a single platform where we learn about different culturesmulticultural aspects. So, the vital impact of media cannot be disregarded. For example, in a multi-cultural city like Toronto, media plays a prominent role in unifying people from different nations and pumps in nationality.
In conclusion, I believe media has a tremendous impactis having a tremendous impact on people's mindsmind and perspectives. Hence, it is equally important to ensure the freedom of media and publication of unbiased news.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear, consistent agreement and supports it with two relevant ways in which media shapes public perspectives, including a particularly effective historical example. Its main limitation is that the cultural-unity discussion and the final point about media freedom are less fully developed and occasionally drift from the precise claim. Prioritise deeper explanation of the second argument and connect every concluding point directly to developed body content.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported by relevant arguments, although the second idea and the closing reference to media freedom are not fully developed.
Develop the multicultural argument with a more specific causal explanation and avoid introducing an unsupported recommendation in the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically through distinct ideas, with clear paragraphing and generally effective linking.
Use less mechanical sequencing and strengthen the internal progression from each example back to the central claim.
Lexical Resource
A good range of topic vocabulary conveys precise ideas, but several awkward collocations reduce naturalness.
Replace expressions such as "pumps in nationality" with natural, context-specific phrasing such as "strengthens a shared national identity."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied mix of sentence structures is generally well controlled, with errors rarely affecting clarity.
Refine article, preposition, and possessive choices, particularly in phrases such as "people's mind" and "views ... over the same issues."
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The mass media, including television, radio and newspapers, have great influence in shaping people's ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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