What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
Sample Response
I am from Russia. In my opinion, the most beneficial discovery for people in our country has been the exploration of outer spacediscovery of the outer space. Russia was the first country to launchis the first country that launched a spacecraft with a man on boarda man on the board into space. This event was a big step towards new discoveriestowards the new discoveries and brought many benefits not only for people in my country. BelowBellow I will give my reasons to support my answer. First of all, all humankind made a huge step towards understanding the mysterytowards the mystery of our creation. Scientists had the opportunity to conduct new researchdo the new research and experiments. Many new discoveries were made on board spacecrafton the boards of the spacecraft in the outer space. People from all over the world watched these events. Many books with real colourful photos were written about the beginning of space explorationthe beginning of the space exploration. Nowadays we have a big station called "Mir" in the outer space created on the base of collaboration USA and Russia. Many people work there doing amazing experiments. From the beginning of humankind until nowFrom the beginning of the mankind till now people are searching some unanswered questionsquestion and I believe those answers are hidden between the outer space and the journey to the outer space has opened the door of possibility to find those answers. Though it’s still part of science fictionthe part of a science fiction that humanshuman will live outside the world someday but I believe that it’s the ultimate fact for us. Secondly, the world became "smaller". People learnt how to exchange information very quickly through satellitesvery quickly by use of satellites. Television is broadcastbroadcasted all over the world via satellitesworld by use of satellites. Here in Houston, I can watch Russian programs. People got the opportunity to exchange news very quickly. The latest telecommunication systems have made the world even smaller. It takes only a few seconds to know the news around the whole world through satellite TV channels. The defence department uses these satellite technologies to get updated data about crime and criminalscriminal. To sum up, I believe that space exploration will bring much more benefits in the future and someday we will learn what is beyond our current galaxy.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response makes a clear choice and offers two recognisable areas of benefit, particularly scientific research and satellite communication. However, much of the discussion remains general, speculative, or only loosely connected to benefits for people in Russia, and language errors recur throughout. The highest priority is to select specific national benefits, explain them with precise examples, and edit awkward sentence structures and collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The chosen discovery is clear and supported by relevant benefits, but the national focus and specific evidence are unevenly developed.
Explain two concrete ways space exploration has benefited people in Russia and support each with a directly relevant example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a recognisable introduction, two-reason sequence, and conclusion, although repetition and some overlong sentences weaken progression.
Separate the response into purposeful paragraphs and remove repeated points about rapid information exchange.
Lexical Resource
Topic-specific vocabulary gives the response some range, but frequent spelling, word-form, and collocational problems limit precision.
Use more natural combinations such as “aboard a spacecraft,” “conduct research,” and “through satellites,” and check spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex structures, but article, plural, preposition, agreement, and clause-control errors occur frequently.
Build complex sentences from accurately controlled clauses and proofread recurring article and noun-number errors.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
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