What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
Sample Response
There have been many inventions in the past one century that has improved the people's life in my country. Here, I would like to talk about the advancement of the agriculture industry that has transformed irrigation and farming process more effectively with less wastage, reduced time and human effort. Firstly, traditionally the irrigation was a human intense work and time-consuming process, like digging the wells, fetching the water from wells and building the passages to the field. In addition, people also depend on rain for natural irrigation, which has an adverse effect of spoiling the crops in case of excess rains. The modern inventions have facilitated the farmers to bore the wells, pump the water and sprinkle the water on the fields quickly. These inventions reduce time and effort spent on boring wells and pulling the water and wastage of water passing over the ground from one end to another end of the field. Secondly, in olden days planting the crops or seeds were a labour- intensive process and consumes more time, the farmers used the drag or harrow to incorporate the seed into the soil. The modern technology used the machines and equipment to sow or plant the seeds evenly at a desired rate that reduces the seed wastages and time to plant the seeds into the soil. It also enables to utilise the land evenly and produce more yield on a given area. Thus, latest innovations accelerated the farmers to produce more in a shorter span of time with reasonable costs, effort and fewer wastages compared to traditional methods.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use natural time phrase Original: past one century Suggested revision: past century Why it matters: The standard expression is ‘the past century’ rather than ‘the past one century’.
- 2. Match plural subject Original: has Suggested revision: have Why it matters: The relative verb must agree with the plural noun ‘inventions’.
- 3. Use plural lives Original: the people's life Suggested revision: people's lives Why it matters: A plural possessive group normally takes the plural noun ‘lives’ here.
- 4. Use concise phrasing Original: advancement of the agriculture industry Suggested revision: advances in agriculture Why it matters: This phrase expresses the intended idea more naturally and directly.
- 5. Use plural process Original: process Suggested revision: processes Why it matters: The discussion refers generally to multiple farming activities, so the plural form is needed.
- 6. Remove unnecessary article Original: traditionally the irrigation Suggested revision: traditionally irrigation Why it matters: ‘Irrigation’ is used as an uncountable general concept and does not take ‘the’ here.
- 7. Remove general article Original: digging the wells Suggested revision: digging wells Why it matters: The plural noun refers to wells in general, so the definite article is unnecessary.
- 8. Keep past tense Original: depend Suggested revision: depended Why it matters: The description of traditional practices should remain in the past tense.
- 9. Use natural collocation Original: excess rains Suggested revision: excessive rainfall Why it matters: ‘Excessive rainfall’ is the natural uncountable expression for too much rain.
- 10. Use correct verb pattern Original: facilitated the farmers to bore Suggested revision: enabled farmers to drill Why it matters: ‘Enable someone to do something’ is the correct pattern, and wells are drilled rather than bored in this context.
- 11. Choose precise verb Original: sprinkle the water Suggested revision: spray water Why it matters: ‘Spray water’ describes the irrigation action more naturally.
- 12. Use precise farming term Original: boring Suggested revision: drilling Why it matters: ‘Drilling wells’ is the conventional expression for creating them.
Suggested Rewrites
- past one century past century
- has have
- the people's life people's lives
- advancement of the agriculture industry advances in agriculture
- process processes
- traditionally the irrigation traditionally irrigation
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response establishes a clear focus on agricultural technology and supports it with relevant contrasts between traditional and modern irrigation and sowing. Its main limitation is that it treats a broad collection of innovations as the chosen discovery and relies on general claims rather than a specific national example. Prioritise one clearly named development, demonstrate its impact with a concrete example, and improve sentence-level control.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response makes a relevant choice and explains two benefits, but it discusses broad agricultural advances rather than one clearly identified discovery and offers no specific national example.
Name one precise discovery and support its benefits with a concrete example from the country concerned.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically from irrigation to planting, although the single-block presentation and several overloaded sentences weaken the clarity of progression.
Separate the main ideas into clear paragraphs and use shorter linking sentences to show each cause-and-effect relationship.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a useful range of topic-specific vocabulary, but awkward collocations and inaccurate word forms reduce precision.
Improve collocational accuracy in phrases about labour, crop yields, water use, and technological change.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of sentence forms conveys the main meaning, but frequent agreement, tense, article, and punctuation errors limit control.
Check subject-verb agreement and verb tense systematically, then divide comma-linked clauses into complete sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
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