Is it wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workers with new and young individuals who have less experience? Give your views in not less than 250 words.

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Sample Response

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Having an efficient workforce has always been one of the most complicated issues faced by industries and companies all around the world. Thus, it is quite controversial whether older experienced workers should be replaced by younger onessubstituted with younger ones. Since strong arguments exist in support of both positionsnotions, both of them should be discussed carefully before any conclusion is drawn. However, my personal opinion is that a younger workforce for an industry is more importantfor industry is more important. On the one hand, old workers can provide significant benefitscontribute vital benefits to the industry due to their sufficient experience in the sector. The first and foremost benefit obtained from old workers is that they know the industry's existing systemsexisting system of the industry quite well. Regarding strengths and weaknesses of the industrypowerful and weak sides of the industry, they can devisedecide solutions in the most practicalconvenient and efficient ways. Furthermore, industries should value their experienceappreciate their work experience and make full use of their knowledgeutilise their knowledge comprehensively in order to maximize profitsmaximize the profit rate. A strong argument can ofcourse be made from the opposite position. Young people are enthusiastic and full of new ideas. Since they are never afraid of taking risks, they can make the most of opportunitiesutilise chances maximumly. Due to young workers' creativity and effortyoungsters' creativeness and efforts, the industry can increase its profitsboost its profit and improve its facilitiesenhance its facility. Hence, if industries aim to improve productivitypromote productiveness, they should encourage young workers and give them greater opportunitiesgive broader chances to them. Moreover, young people have greater exposure to new technologies, which istechnologies which is a substantial advantage of having them. On all accounts, although older workers have sufficient experienceexperiences, industries should promote more young workers in order to achieve successacquire accomplishments. As far as I am concerned, we should inspire the young generation, because we should not forget that they are builders of our future life.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response's strongest feature is its clear comparison of older workers' institutional knowledge with younger workers' enthusiasm, ideas, and technological familiarity. Its main limitation is that it advocates promoting young people without fully deciding whether wholesale replacement of experienced staff is wise, and numerous unnatural word choices reduce precision. The highest priority is to evaluate the consequences of replacement directly and propose a clearly justified staffing decision rather than relying on broad claims about youth.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

6.5
Scoring rule

Relevant benefits of both age groups are discussed and a preference for younger workers is stated, but the wisdom of replacing experienced staff is not evaluated precisely enough.

Next step

Address the risks of losing expertise and explain whether replacement, gradual succession, or a mixed workforce would best serve the industry.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

5.5
Scoring rule

The argument follows a recognisable older-versus-younger sequence, but the single-paragraph format and formulaic transitions weaken overall organisation.

Next step

Use separate paragraphs for experienced workers, younger workers, and the final comparative judgment.

LR

Lexical Resource

5.5
Scoring rule

The response attempts a reasonable range of workplace vocabulary, but frequent incorrect collocations and word formations make several claims sound unnatural.

Next step

Use precise combinations such as identify solutions, seize opportunities, creativity, improve productivity, and achieve results.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Scoring rule

A range of complex sentences is used with generally understandable control, although errors in articles, number, reference, and clause construction remain noticeable.

Next step

Proofread plural and uncountable nouns and ensure introductory phrases connect grammatically to the subject of the main clause.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Is it wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workers with new and young individuals who have less experience? Give your views in not less than 250 words.

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